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AGE:
20
LOC: Fitzgerald, GA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 25
LOC: Fitzgerald, GA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 25
Im only 16, live in a small town in southern Georgia. I write in my own stylized way. Lots of fragments very descriptive. Usually write short stories with a down, dirty, sad tone.
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I Thought I thought I was in love. I thought he was the one. I thought we’d be together forever. I thought I knew what I was doing. I thought I knew. I thought I knew what I was feeling, but whatever it was must’ve been a lie. Never did I realize how alone I was until I felt the cold, black chair begin to numb my naked butt and back. The numbness awoke me from my utopian state and brought me back to my brutal reality. Here I am sitting on this cold, black chair alone, in this damp grey h...
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I Thought I thought I was in love. I thought he was the one. I thought we’d be together forever. I thought I knew what I was doing. I thought I knew. I thought I knew what I was feeling, but whatever it was must’ve been a lie. Never did I realize how alone I was until I felt the cold, black chair begin to numb my naked butt and back. The numbness awoke me from my utopian state and brought me back to my brutal reality. Here I am sitting on this cold, black chair alone, in this damp grey h...
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I thought I was in love. I thought he was the one. I thought we’d be together forever. I thought I knew what I was doing. I thought I knew what I was getting into. I thought I knew what I was feeling, but whatever it was it must’ve been a lie. I never realized how alone I was until I, felt the cold black chair, begin to numb my naked butt and back. The numbness awoke me from my utopian state and brought me back to reality. Here I am sitting on this cold chair alone, in this damp grey hos...
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As I sit here stuck between life and death I constantly say to myself “I’m not dead,†and foolishly I believe it. As I sit here floating, surrounded by all these beautiful hues, I wonder to myself “When will this devilish dream finally come to an end. Today. Tomorrow. Yesterday? Is this dream really my new reality?†It can’t be is always the conclusion I come to. This place, this…….. this…….this limbo is just another one of my prophetic dreams. Maybe one day this will be ...
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I thought I was in love. I thought he was the one. I thought we’d be together forever. I thought I knew what I was doing. I thought I knew what I was getting into. I thought I knew what I was feeling, but whatever it was it must’ve been a lie. I never realized how alone I was until I, felt the cold black chair, begin to numb my naked butt and back. The numbness awoke me from my utopian state and brought me back to reality. Here I am sitting on this cold chair alone, in this damp gray hosp...
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as a whole the song is really good. the lyrics are very descriptive and it brings you in to help you follow the song. the only thing i can really complain about is the three lines As we travel a path that's travel worn And our scars are bleeding thus But I guess that's us... it was just something about they way it was worded that through me off
Overall for me it has a nice tone, and something i would want to read more about. The beginning for me doesnt really work. It doesnt draw me in and ave me where i dont want to look away. It didnt really catch my eyes ya know. but as i read more it grew on me. id like to hear what happens next.
Well i think your whole thesis, or lack there of is not very well developed through out. If you would have taken more time to develop your arguments, found some sources to support your view it could have been better.
thats some funny stuff you got here, all i can think about is well, taco bell
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