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AGE: 53
LOC: Scottsville, KY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 05

sometimes i can be very clownish,,

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she said “your forgetting something pa. As the old man reached the door” he said “I’m leaving you my guitar for I don’t need it anymore. I knew this day was coming kid I wanted you prepared so look inside that worn out case there’s something we can share... the days that he looked back on have caught up with him now but with a cherished writing pad he has them written down a song book like a diary a grandpa like a friend on the pages of that writi...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Ballad of Bloody Breathitt
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The cards were on the table in a house to hard to change, where 38's were loaded , also noted for they’re range, minutes changed to hours and looks began to stare an east Kentucky poker game with suspicions in the air minutes changed to hours the deal from hand to hand the stakes hit the flood gate for the breathitt county clan music in the background whiskey in their reach and the queen of hearts floats in a shirt on a east Kentucky creek one couldn’t draw the queen the king was hidden well...
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We knew this day was coming, the calendar’s so quick time is such a vicious dog, so wise to every trick his collar now has fallen ,so soon to say goodbye, he wont allow no looking back, what we had must die. the vicious dog is prowling, turning this away and that the vicious dog is growling , there’s no way of going back yesterday’s forbidden, today is in his teeth, time is like a vicious dog, who’s always on his feet, hurry now and take my hand, let’s promise to the stars turn around and sa...
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what happened to our paradise we’re no longer king and queen and now a fog of envy has drifted into the scene over in a coffin our love is dressed in black peace has left as lighting and it’s never coming back our busy lives created law took our magic far away our smiles that lived so free are shackled here today we stand before this jealousy such a cruel and wicked judge forgiveness now forbidden imprisoned with this grudge There’s a mote of hate around us dug by demons which we keep slurs ...
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Poetry / caring love
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love is forever; caring is why
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Lyrics / Above All Else
overall I feel you did well ,, however maybe when posting on urbis you might want to drop the shortcuts you know where you insert the brakets ( ) It is a very iron clad door at the music hall in Nashville ascap records alone has over five million submissions to make it these days your lyric has to be air tight .. keep writing you have covered your first base extremely well lookingbeyond
Flash Fiction / insanity
if one of the big drawings was having a good old fashion cb radio ,, I would have to give you a hearty 10/4 one this one ,,, no kidding this is pretty good ok,, your friend lookingbeyond
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / 6-word memoir - Stairway
You have a strong mind, seems you must support it with thoughts of love . you generate inspirations , that should be taught to the youth of this perplexed nation that you and I call home. I reckon we do have to "think" we can think of the experience that taught us how to love .. this memoir would be complete if placed on cover of school books your friend Lookingbeyond ...
Lyrics / Charlie
this is by far the best lyric I have read on this hear , urbis site. kudos to the aurthor . so tell me author who is Charlie ? just kidding ... hey this one here is your hit verse You can push me to the welfare line Use all of yours and then take mine But I am not a number I am not your bottom line" you could condense that some , but it might mess it up , depends on the music line .. so get ahold of Charlie and push this lyric to the stage . lookingbeyond
read your lyrics , so hard to say much about em , until you hear the music but I feel that it has a chance , I would add another six line verse to even it out, but not really nescessary.. kind of sounds like a fleetwood mac kind of tune . keep at the key board , lookingbeyond
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