I am not really sure what to make of this one. It's good, but it kind of leaves you lost in the thought. It could be about many things. I usually like reading things that kinda leave you guessing, but this one I'm not quite sure. It kind of left me hanging so much that I got lost in trying to figure it out. Overall, it was pretty good.

I liked this. It shows the heartless acts that we sometimes preform without even thinking. Yet it opens the eyes so that we can become more aware of that and improve it. Now what I am wondering is if it was intintionally done to let the cashier keep the change in disgust with the homeless man, or was it really just an act of forgetfulness. Either way, it was good.

I thought it was really good. It stayed connected and wasn't scattered. And it is a very sweet poem and the fact that it is about you and your fiance made it even better. I'm not sure how you could improve it, since you mentioned that you are working on the punctuation of it.

I really enjoyed this. With our sociaety these days most people try to avoid subjects like this and pretend they don't exhist. But you put it right out there and I loved the fact that you included the reason she was cutting and showed that it was like an addiction and not just for attention. I loved the choice of words. Keep up the good work.

This really made no sense to me at all. There is no focal point, so I was unable to determine what it was supposed to be about. The rhyming itself was good, but you need to express more of what it is supposed to be about.

I wouldn't exactly call it poetry, but it is a start. Elaborate on it and work on the rhyme. Maybe go into more detail about the situation. Like you said, it's a start.

This is a good piece. It deeply described the mourning of a loved one. You went to great detail explaining her sorrow, which alot of time people leave out those little details. I can't think of a way to improve it. It is wonderful.