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I read this and marveled at your honesty over what you experienced via your bi-polarish former roomie. I also loved your honest view and take on what you experienced as a result of that kinship. In the same sense, though, I felt myself wanting to hear the ex-roommate's side of things. I'm really not knocking any of your writing; it was refreshing, blunt-yet-forgiving, and what I most like, a little bit naive. Trust me; my saying this is nothing but compliment. However, I'd love to see a futur...

I have two words for you, for starters... Thank you! Brilliant is most definitely the perfect adjective to use here. Honest is another, funny is yet another. These three combined, mixed with your talent, and you've got the kind of read that leaves me feeling entertained, not alone, and sated. This is good truth and good writing, good therapy, and good advice, whether you meant to give it or not. The only thing that isn't good is the job you did. Good doesn't cut it, this piece of commentary w...

Right off the bat, I normally don't like 'rhyming'. This works, though. Maybe it's the activist in me, and maybe it's the hibernating hippie nestled somewhere in my body, probably between my heart and my soul... this is a work I entirely relate to, agree with, and upon reading, feel the urge to thrust fist in air, yelling 'Right On!'. You have reached me with your honesty, rhyme or not, and I heard you. Good job!

I hate to seem as if I'm continually picking on you, but this is brilliantly-worded 'nuthin'. You have unbelievable grasp of vocabulary, but an equally unbelievable ability to show us all your insecurity through flowery attempts like this. In the long run, you end up telling us that you hold promise, but haven't reached it yet. I believe that your major flaw lies in caring too much about the status quo, and about what you think you are supposed to write. I suggest you do a couple of things in...

This was such a good example,in my opinion, of natural and honest writing. Your dialogue is superb, your descriptions are neither over or underdone, your characters are interesting, layered, and entirely believable, and your subject matter is touching. Thumbs up to you!