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AGE: 20
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 18

absolutely insane and livng life. more then that can not be said. im really young and still very inexperienced. my grammar and spelling is horible, i know that already so please dont point that out to me.  other then that i welcome all critisism.  and im still fairly new at this so dont hesitate to point out anything i do wrong if i do end up reviewing your work…

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Short Story / sunny
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“It’s a sunny day outside. In my opinion it is too sunny, too hot. There is absolutely no wind. Not even the smallest sign of a breeze. I hat e the weather when it is like this. It’s like a hot suffocating blanket and there is nothing you can do to lift it off. I would have preferred a cold day to this, but in some way I guess its befitting the circumstances. Actually, now that I think about it, the weather is perfect. At least something is happening in my favour. The first ...
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Novel Treatments / letters from war chapter 1
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Dear Ursula, 3 March 1928 How are you doing? How is your mom? And Jimmy boy? William and me are just fine. We’re just having a lousy time adjusting to the weather. It’s mighty cold and it doesn’t want to stop raining. I miss the sunshine. I miss your smile. I’ve made some new friends. All of them have girls waiting for them. I tell them I have you waiting for me. You’re waiting, aren’t you? How many days have past since I’ve last seen you? A day, a we...
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Short Story / life aint always sunny
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“It’s a sunny day outside. In my opinion it is too sunny, too hot. There is absolutely no wind. Not even the smallest sign of a breeze. I hat e the weather when it is like this. It’s like a hot suffocating blanket and there is nothing you can do to lift it off. I would have preferred a cold day to this, but in some way I guess its befitting the circumstances. Actually, now that I think about it, the weather is perfect. At least something is happening in my favour. The first ...
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Quotes / guess im not sure what im supposed to feel anymore
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Every morning I wake up and I do what I have to do. I go through the motions but I really can’t remember the last time I got excited over anything worth while. I really can’t remember when was the last time that I felt more then just phantom feelings… you know, those feelings that mirror the ones your supposed to have, that look vaguely like the normal ones… I wonder when I’ll wake up from this dream? I wonder if I will ever wake up from this dream… will...
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Poetry / the reasons
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When I look at you I think about all the reasons I love you So many come to mind I love the way you look up at me sometimes That big smile on your face Happiness in you eyes Pure happiness and love I love the way you touch Tender, with passion, with love When you touch me I know That you’ll never hurt me When you touch me I feel loved I love your hands And they way they move The way they make me feel special I love it when you hold me close Your arms tightly wrapped around me Your lo...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / I Believe:The Goryo-Ch1 of 7
by FrakKevin
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Poetry / Deathbed
by frankthebeing
its really good, well written and deep. im guessing at a sea voiage gone wrong? im not sure i get the lil clowns, what they are? but at first it feels like their doing good, and then they start punishing. like the hero is enjoying the rain on his face and then all of asudden it turns into a storn and its not enjoyable anymore. but then maybe im seeing it to literal, but its really good.
Poetry / I was four
by gting
it is a beautiful piece... it takes me back to being four and wishing that life could be that care free again. it really is stunning thank you for sharing it with us
Novel Treatments / Angélique City
by dcyuelling
firstof all... my name is angelique... so i havta love the name of the city! haha youll keep me coming back for more just cos of that... dont have spell checker on just wana be sure... is lustrous spelt like that? lusterous? dunno just checking page two you seemto be using alot of similies, your a brilliant writer... you dont need them to show something to a reader. use your skill. one or maybe even two similies are more then enough. Then he feel sick, his stomach - then he felt sick He’s nev...
Poetry / A Simple Thank You
by greydoggal
thank you its touching and beautiful and we can never say thank you enough. its lovely. there are just a few placeswhere the sentences stretched on for too long, either need a coma or need to break it into two sentences. thank you for sharing it
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