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AGE: 55
LOC: Bristow, VA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 18

I have traveled the world and seen many wonderous things.  I have also seen many terrors.  I write to rid myself of the nightmares and demons.

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Short Story / The Nightmare
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The Nightmare It starts off innocent enough; you are dreaming that you are back in the Sand Box, riding in your old HUMVEE through one of a thousand little villages. Today the ride is different; you see blue skies not the brown sky of dirt and dust; green fields of barley instead of the dusty scrub land on the right side of the HUMVEE and small kids yelling for candy on the left side. Your old crew is in the vehicle with you. Henry, your CHU mate is driving while SFC McKinney is up in the fro...
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Poetry / SECURITY OFFICER
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SECURITY OFFICER Serving Emergency Caring Urgent Responsive Intelligent Trained Yielding Official Friendly Factual Investigative Concise Effectual Resourceful
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Non-fiction / By Night
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3 Reviews   2 Comments
By Night By night She is not alone Alone to ply her pleasure trade A trade that always promises the world A world where that she can become part of The Part of a world consisting of daylight and goodness A goodness that spreads kindness and softness A softness that she can sleep on A sleep that has dreams No nightmares By night
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Poetry / I AM
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10 Reviews   0 Comments
I AM I am the shadow of the moon less night. I am the hawk who swoops from above, to snatch my prey with the speed of a bullet. I am the ghostly filament that passes you in the fog. I am here yet there, near yet far, fire yet ice . . . Yes, I am all of these, and yet I am also a father, proud of his own.
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Humor/Satire / The Beauty and The Beast
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Beauty and the Beast As she walked into the crowded restaurant and time slowed to a crawl. It was as if she walked off the pages of a Vargas drawing, She was perfect in every detail! Her hair was the color of golden wheat. It flowed behind her as if it had been lifted up by an invisible force. Her smile is as brilliant as a thousand exploding suns. She walked in the crowded room as if she were a big cat looking for prey. Every muscle and movement had its own sensual movement. Her face had an...
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Short Story / Clay
I like the piece due to the moral of the story. I would have tightened up the first paragraph to move it along a little quicker. I felt that it was a little slow, but after the first paragraph the piece moved fairly quickly. This line I would have changed it to an active version: "Rebecca was ecstatic to walk to the market with a new face." Maybe "Wearing her new face, Rebecca was ecstatic as she walked to the market." Other than that I thought it was a great piece with a very good moral! Wayne
Haiku/Senryu / Cuisinart
The 5-7-5 works for this Haiku poem and it is certainly a Senryu with the cynical meaning of the poem. It is a good spin on lost of love.
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Poetry / Utopia
The piece had a nature flow to it that it keep up to the very end. Although I did have a small problem with this stanza: Are a helpful presence And the trials of life Just challenging lessons I would only add "Are" to 'Just challenging lessons' just to make it flow a little better. I think this is a very pubishable piece that agents or publishers should take the time to look and review. It was a very good piece of poetry!
Publishable - It flows very well with a couple of exceptions: Line 6 is a little forced. I would change the word 'pulls' with 'puts' but it is the writer's choice. Line 11 doesn't flow like it should. I would drop 'to fast' to make it flow easier. The overall piese is very good.
Poetry / Alive
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