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LOC: Canada
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Stage Play / Awakening
Version 2
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Characters: Shera – A zombie back from the dead Jeanne – A female in her twenties. Belle – Jeanne's friend Charlie – Belle's boyfriend Place: The living room of Jeanne's house Time: Nearing midnight Place: Jeanne's living room Costumes: Belle and Jeanne are dressed in black, as if just coming from a wake. Charlie should be dressed similarly, but should give the impression that he had nothing really appropriate to wear at the wake. Shera is dressed sharply, as most people are in a casket. ...
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Stage Play / Zombie for a Day
Version 1
13 Reviews   0 Comments
*Zombie for a Day* *Characters:* Shera – A zombie back from the dead Jeanne – A female in her twenties. Belle – Jeanne's friend Charlie – Belle's boyfriend *Place:* The living room of Jeanne's house *Time:* Nearing midnight (Belle is standing apart from the set, the lights focused on her. Behind her, the scene of her living room is set up, with the rest of the characters in place, unmoving, and with dimmed lights) BELLE: You'll probably find this hard to believe. If I didn't see it with my ow...
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Short Story / Desert of Glass
Version 1
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Long ago, the Aura Desert was much like any other desert: Just miles and miles of sand, with the occasional cactus, or rock. However, that has changed now. Like many places on this war-torn planet, this too is an ancient battlefield. However, here, the humans suffered a crushing defeat. Though the humans eventually won the war against the gods, they did not win every battle. The Aura Desert stands as a testament to this fact. Once, there were many nomadic tribes and small villages in the Aura...
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Very provocative use of language. The imagery is very powerful in this piece. The use of "you" in the first and last paragraph seems quite unconventional, and (as a male reader) makes it seem a little bit strange, but does make it unique. One small thing: second-last paragrapgh, "Cruelty melts. Is replaced by ..." Starting it with "is" seems a little awkward, so perhaps "Cruelty melts, replaced by dripping pain..." Great piece overall!
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It's good! Well written, and kept my attention. The ending made me feel sad, which is rare for a short story. It somehow felt more real than other kinds of tragedies that occur in stories ... I don't have any constructive criticism, which is rare from me :) I'd say it's in pretty good shape now. Good luck getting it published!
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Quotes / Life and Death
Nice piece of philosophy, sounds sort of Buddhist to me. Would be a cool line for a character in a story. Nice quote overall.
Short Story / A Glympse of the Other
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