I admire the self-honesty, you as your own behavior's witness. Doggerel is a fantastic word choice (not for this poem! but the context it illuminates). Great imagery. I'm not sure I'd change much here...I'm torn about the repetition of the word "haze," but otherwise very nice.

I'm conflicted about this piece. I was turned off at the outset, because I feel that calling out loneliness is too obvious and over-told. But there are some really nice bits in here - "dined on helpings of smiles and laughter"..."an occasional irritant sneeze"...and the last two lines are really nice. I guess if I was to give advice, I would suggest making the overall message a little more subtle...take some time to draw us in and wonder about the theme, then illuminate.

Gruesome! But I like that in a poem. :) Line 3 is great, and I love the line "Smitten in her feeble world" - lovely summation of the predator/prey relationship. "An ankle bracelet of discourage" is nicely phrased. I'm not sure what you intended for the line, here: "And love the scaring" - should it be loved the scaring? or loved the scarring? Either way I think you're missing a "d." I'm not sure what a copper fetish is?

Very sweet. Without your explanation, it would read a little cliche to me, so it helps to know the background behind the work - thanks for sharing that. :)

I have a hard time grasping this, not knowing what the gray horizon represents. It might be great, if I knew that...but unfortunately it leaves me confused, otherwise.

This is effective - it leaves its own stones unturned, as I wonder what his are...nice!

This is delightful! I got such a fun rush, putting myself in your shoes...or on your pony, as the case may be. ;) I really don't know how to judge what is "Western enough..." the overall spirit, to me, is of freedom and exhilaration. It's very clear, so no concerns there. I really don't want to nitpick it...I hope that's ok?

I think that you mean to compare a woman to a painting...but it's a little unclear...and I guess, to be honest, not a very compelling idea to me. I'm not sure what the "black hole sucking you inside" refers to, either. I think I'd work a little more on clarity.

With poetic thems such as pain and agony, I prefer either a little more innuendo, or a more powerful voice...to call it out makes it less effective, at least for my taste. I'm also unclear on the last stanza...I don't, actually, know the tale of which you begin. Sorry, I guess it just didn't strike a chord for me.