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AGE: 37
LOC: Seattle, WA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 06

I’m only an incidental poet.

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too dizzy for pretty words too concrete for much of pretty anything leaden but spinning be wary piss poor maintenance on these traveling carnival rides my mind in week-long labor cord-wrapped, surprise septuplets weak, weak pulse my synapses, dangerous blue babies I sweat I grit I writhe meanwhile you cower, brass tacks poor baby, you fuck you and the lies you came in on and your you're? we're back to me breach or otherwise, or slice me open spank, scream, trauma predictably, you flee meanwhi...
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Poetry / golden happiness
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in this instant I feel dawn on me we've our own brogue you and I direct connect or just signals in distant yet audible keys and even in silence I hear you when you speak target audience: me in this twilight I feel panic could it be? les mots aimé yours and mine spawned silence signal to noise breakdown misreckoning snap decisions I'm deaf when you don't speak target: misfire as for me mute(ations) spawned from fear speaking nothing you can hear tired of hiding of noiseless questioning of dark...
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Poetry / scaling II
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awakening now from ego's sleep newfound olfactory acceptance meets ebbed fear and only reality bites still chuckling amidst lament 10-meter pleasure dash now mutilated marathon and mini me paves track/sets blocks/fires pistol then sits bewildered when once again they're off (gulping, unwhole) too fast now thank you, ever, dearest flame your existence makes me feel less alone and lionheart with roar miraculously/simultaneously mercurial/perennial and of course the taken one for future dreams, ...
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Poetry / scaling I
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awakening from a night without sleep and finally acknowledging the whiff of ebb tide and minnow me joins in the stenchmaking but even amidst the shreckstoff i've gotta chuckle silver shimmer gets gold medals in sprint from point a to b list above which float (i mention by not mentioning) mysterious sensibility-laden empty explanations for this sea change (which I swallow whole) too wet now thank you, midnight mentor saviour love and you, sweet lionheart and dearly you, eternal flame la, la an...
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With poetic thems such as pain and agony, I prefer either a little more innuendo, or a more powerful voice...to call it out makes it less effective, at least for my taste. I'm also unclear on the last stanza...I don't, actually, know the tale of which you begin. Sorry, I guess it just didn't strike a chord for me.
Poetry / Desire
I think that you mean to compare a woman to a painting...but it's a little unclear...and I guess, to be honest, not a very compelling idea to me. I'm not sure what the "black hole sucking you inside" refers to, either. I think I'd work a little more on clarity.
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