kidwitprobs's profile

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AGE: 18
LOC: Casco, MI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 03

I have two sides, one: i am outgoing, smart, and generally a funny guy two: i am deaply emotionaly, confused, depressed, and angry…that side i keep to myself…....i hide my emotions behind a simple smile, poetry is pretty much how i express that side of me.

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Short Story / Blind Bravery
Version 2
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I cannot see the letters on this keyboard. The R looks like a B. The B looks like a P. I click the space button with insecurities. A period leaving a sentence behind that I can only guess is right. I click the backspace button five times before I get one whole word down on this piece of digital paper. I press enter. I press tab. I start a new part of the story bringing all of my insecurities with me causing my ultimate failure in this paper. When you cannot see the letters you move on blind, ...
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Short Story / Bush In The Mirror
Version 2
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I remember when you were young. You laughed, played, and your only worry was who was “It” in tag. You would play cops and robbers and would always be the robber because of that movie you saw where the bad guy won. I remember when you first watched “The Godfather” in complete awe. You wanted to be the man with unrefusable offers and goons waiting on your every word. You wanted that power that God himself couldn’t possible dream about. Now you are lost in your own power. Seeking lives to ruin f...
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Short Story / Bush In The Mirror
Version 1
7 Reviews   2 Comments
I remember when you were young. You laughed, played, and your only worry was who was “It” in tag. You would play cops and robbers and would always be the robber because of that movie you saw where the bad guy won. I remember when you first watched “The Godfather” in complete awe. You wanted to be the man with unrefusable offers and goons waiting on your every word. You wanted that power that God himself couldn’t possible dream about. I remember when you ran for president. Yes now you have tha...
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Short Story / Blind Bravery
Version 1
2 Reviews   0 Comments
I cannot see the letters on this keyboard. The R looks like a B. The B looks like a P. I click the space button with insecurities. A period leaving a sentence behind that I can only guess is right. I click the backspace button five times before I get one whole word down on this piece of digital paper. I press enter. I press tab. I start a new part of the story bringing all of my insecurities with me causing my ultimate failure in this paper. When you cannot see the letters you move on blind a...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / A life of solitude.
Version 1
5 Reviews   3 Comments
I live by two simple rules. One: Breathe in and out to get through the day. Two: Happiness is the key to life. If all whose around you is happy then you have achieved the greatest thing a man can achieve. My problem is the happiness part. I may have to change that second rule. Making people happy is the worst thing that I have ever done. I am trying my hardest to keep everyone happy that I forget about myself completly. I am just that crazy guy with the bad luck to me. I will give up my legs ...
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Short Story / Nice Things
This was a great story. I have nothing to contribute because I believe this to be a perfect story. I loved in the beginning when you wrote: "...and some fallen where they had been cast away after failing the woman." This woman lived a horrid life and throught this story she is crying until she kills her sun letting her get all of that built up frustration out of her system then she stops crying and just smiles as she walks toward her husband. I really loved this i gave you a 10 on your rating...
Novel Treatments / Cold Heat
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Screenplay / untitled - scene 1
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Poetry / Here We Go Again
First I would just like to say that I like the basic theme behind this poem and the overall story to it. Other than that you seem to try too hard to rhyme. Remember poetry is no about rhyme it's about rhythm and metaphor. If you must rhyme then choose your words carefully. I think after some wordplay this poem really could be a winner and I would love to read the finished product.
Novel Treatments / Betrayal
nice, i like how you portayed your charecters...nice style, unique...for that i will give you a 9