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AGE:
35
LOC: Union, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 15
LOC: Union, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 15
I am an actor, artist, and author. Although I have written several books I am still learning how to appreciate the written word. If my critiques seem too harsh then please ignore them. Learning should be a joyous experience and not a task :) However, some of the best skills (and goals) in life require hard work and concentration. That in itself can be very pleasurable if done with passion and fortitude.
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BOY is an intricate story focusing on the dynamics of a modern dysfunctional family and the physical, mental, and spiritual illnesses that are affecting them. BOY looks into the psyche of a seemingly harmless developed mentally disabled person who is capable of more than the world expects of him. A journey into the mind of BOY is a trip into the murky depths of human apathy, innocence, and betrayal. Forward When I was 29 years old I had the unfortunate occurrence of meeting a deceitful and im...
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At times I found this a bit harsh especially because I too fall into that "death list" however you make a strong point that we are here to learn and take criticism. I know that I am a part of the 99% that makes all those mistakes but sometimes you have to make the mistakes (even you admit it) to become a better writer. I wish that I had someone whispering in my ear those precious secrets when I started to write but that would deter the process of exploring the text created by numerous writers...
At first I was confused on the timeline but it made sense as I read. Initially it seemed pre 911 because of the officials lack of concern towards serious threats like Osama Bin Ladin. The detail to military procedure is excellent... I learned from it and I am assuming that the writer has a military background or knows someone who does. The names Condor and Chief are often over used in military stories but that adds to the reality of the piece. I would have preferred the use of fictional chara...
All of the images are powerful although I had to keep rereading the poem to understand the context of this relationship gone bad. I was impressed by the visual content and liked the lines "Sardonically he bleeds pathogen thru his song:" and "Will she cast the third stone into the fiery pits of tomorrow? Is this hollow pebble that rambles in her shoe worth fighting another regardless war for more sorrow" These lines reveal the hopeless feelings that one gets when not sure of what the future ho...
I love the theatre too! There is something magical about the performances. People don't realize how powerful the affects of the theatre on society. Before tv and movies the theatre was the venue that controlled the social borders and more often pushed them with controversial ideas and subject matter. The very norms of our social acceptance were established by the theatre in both modern and ancient times. The simplicity of your poem gives it a complexity that is hard to put into words. In othe...
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