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I like this, it's a nice inspirational thought!

Sometimes I think we are drawn to the more painful relationships because the pain is like momentum. When something isn't perfect we can idealize what it could be. And what we imagine is always better than any reality. Love is pain, true, but it's also fantasy. We keep fighting for some ideal and the fighting and the pain become powerful in themselves because they're associated with that ideal. I think the most powerful relationships come from striving for a beautiful ideal, even if we never r...

I love the closing statement from "Honestly.." I know exactly how you feel. Sometimes when someone loves you so much you want to love them back just for loving you. It's hard to know if it's more kind to give him a chance or to let him go and spare him from a potential rejection. I can also relate to the uneasiness that comes with being so utterly revered by someone. I always tend to think, I'm not perfect, no one is. So if he thinks I'm perfect, does he really know me? Or is it a projected i...

Is the "single device" that you mention a television? I'm not sure if this is meant to be read literally, but that was the image I got from the references to light suddenly stretching forth and pixilation. I did find some of the language a bit challenging to sift through..In the first stanza for example I couldn't follow which nouns went with which verbs: are the pipes that "scale walls" also what is being "haunted" and "hung"? By the second half it started to read a bit more clearly for me. ...

It reminds me of a haiku - very simple and to-the-point, and it focuses on a single image. The phrase "flames were like wildfires" seems a little redundant. Maybe their love (or the lovers themselves)is like wildfires? I would also get rid of "may" in the last line because you already said it earlier. Even though it's a short poem I think you could trim it up to make it really concise and powerful.