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AGE: 34
LOC: Boaz, AL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 03

Just hit 33, living in NE Alabama.  Working on five different books (various genres)  and working for a living.  Married with the toddlers, I tend to be an outdoorsman as often as possible.  Have written a number of essays and poems and trying to get my first manuscript rewritten as a screenplay.  Please check out the excerpts from “Fire For Effect” in my portfolio.  It is the most complete of my books and by far the most marketable.

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Poetry / The '95 Vintage
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Dreams are the best I can conjure now. The faded Tobasco tie stifles any recollections. Any hint of a concise instant of my past now as unattainable in my head as they are to grasp in my calloused hands. Friends long since folded into the fray and dead. The web, though world wide, never sticky enough to bind us shoulder to shoulder. Somewhere their rapturous spirits are mere mortar for brick walls that divide us from the loving bedrock and the insanity that launched us occasionally from mort...
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As a summer buff, I weep annually when green falters fruits wither leaves blowing asunder from forces far past my mere mortal understanding unseen- yet felt. Sloughing off vibrancy in lieu of a stark nudity stoic trunks face anew a whimsical firing squad of ice. Yet as I sit here looking into the shadow of an increasingly bare elm bare feet cold coughing, nose runny epiphany overwoughts my chilly premonitions. Now I can see more of the sky.  
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The two tiny sons I love have been raised on hardwood floors. No fluffy plush and padded carpet cushions their falls as they learn to walk the tidy asphalt streets and unkempt gravel roads certain to lie ahead. Their feet will be theirs for the rest of their lives. Shoes they will outgrow and toss away either by decline of fashionable interest or sheer time of usefulness. Their tough feet will always take them the rest of their way. One bare foot in front of the other if need be. There a...
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 Plus-button Clarity
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As a summer buff, I weep annually when green falters fruits wither leaves blowing asunder from forces far past my mere mortal understanding unseen- yet felt. Sloughing off vibrancy in lieu of a stark nudity stoic trunks face anew a whimsical firing squad of ice. Yet as I sit here looking into the shadow of an increasingly bare elm bare feet cold coughing, nose runny epiphany overwoughts my chilly premonitions. Now I can see more of the sky. And that sun on its holiday tilt, will shine f...
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A dervish in life, now so much more so in death tossing aside notions of physics and poise silent sexy shadow spinning asunder her daily essence a loco trip without tangibility . Now she puts on a show unencumbered by pangs of self awareness or tethers to mortal earth. In the glow of black lights a sultry sparkle spinning. Billions of dusty specks colliding undeniably revealing her glowing form. At times she beckons to me as I lay beaming on our bed. That glittering finger of sultry moxie, be...
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Short Story / "The Safe House"
Some quick notes and suggestions: (brief due to credits) seams not seems ...it is not. I am simply grateful... ...whiskey taste sweeter on the nights you dwell too much. ...more like a living trance. ...too easy, cut and dried acts of evil to prove to us they are foul. But,.. ...an escape. I was lucky, I found one. Would cut a few of the ands out and make new sentences where the contraction is. You never indicate who she is in relation to you, family, friend, imaginary? Just a few quick thoug...
Non-fiction / getting to mr. right
Without any information to go on as far as what this piece is to be (short, novel, essay, etc.) I can only go on the heading Beginning and Middle and assume some things about it. The first issue is probably not your fault but Urbis. There are no paragraph indents that would help with the pacing of the story. It is a bit willy-nilly to read but I suspect it's due to the format. I tend to be a direct writer when I go, being a fan of Papa it is my normal cry of "Simplify!" that I will toss out h...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / My Father's Son
Very touching. I lost my mother when I was 23 and carrying on much as you when the news of dreaded cancer came, so I can relate completely. As for tats, I have none and really never cared for them on me. I am not adverse to them on others and for a personal devotional to your father, it fits the bill. One note though. Van Gogh's Starry Night is a classic and an interesting choice, but did your father not have any works of his own for copying? Even a kite woudl be an intersting choice if perso...
Haiku/Senryu / Opposites Attract
Typical haiku should blend a little better. Summer thunderstorm doesn't clench into the first lines or the title.
Novel Treatments / Future Crime Chpt 6 (1/3)
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