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LOC: Boaz, AL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 17
LOC: Boaz, AL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 17
Just hit 33, living in NE Alabama. Working on five different books (various genres) and working for a living. Married with the toddlers, I tend to be an outdoorsman as often as possible. Have written a number of essays and poems and trying to get my first manuscript rewritten as a screenplay. Please check out the excerpts from “Fire For Effect” in my portfolio. It is the most complete of my books and by far the most marketable.
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Doctor Varner patted me forlornly upon my wrist and gave me a pained smile. The smile was a well-practiced and probably well-used expression of dignified attention to the prescribed details involved in one’s pending demise. It was a fake, I was sure. But I had long since given the man the benefit of the doubt in regards to his prowess and candor. He had done what he could; it was not enough. The simple sigh and smile routine w...
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A Country Song When you sing a song of revelry, hum that giddy tune for me, for soon I shall be leaving- the caged bird fluttering free. Cry not when my wings feel the air towards Heaven my eyes are fixed, I'll hug you when you greet me there if you stay away from the devil's tricks. My number's been called and we lived it all and for that a man's gotta pay his bill eventually. Been blind for so long, out from dusk till dawn, Think someone I haven't talked to much is ready to be a-calling...
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Thigh-Deep in Aimless Thought The river splits around the implacable man. Solid he stands against the pressure the angry current failing against the thighs unsteady stones wildly tumbling asunder yet firm beneath his felt feet- the impotent granite unable to shake its mortal captor. There are no trevails, no details out standing thigh-deep in aimless thought. Hours lost flailing the bound feather, stitched steel and impaled fur sent adrift. Sun nor cloud of no significance. He and the rippl...
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Dreams are the best I can conjure now. The faded Tabasco tie stifles any recollections. Any hint of a concise instant of my past now as unattainable in my head as they are to grasp in my calloused hands. Friends long since folded into the fray and dead. The web, though world wide, never sticky enough to bind us shoulder to shoulder. Somewhere their rapturous spirits are mere mortar for brick walls that divide us from the loving bedrock and the insanity that launched us occasionally from mort...
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Dreams are the best I can conjure now. The faded Tobasco tie stifles any recollections. Any hint of a concise instant of my past now as unattainable in my head as they are to grasp in my calloused hands. Friends long since folded into the fray and dead. The web, though world wide, never sticky enough to bind us shoulder to shoulder. Somewhere their rapturous spirits are mere mortar for brick walls that divide us from the loving bedrock and the insanity that launched us occasionally from mort...
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Some quick notes and suggestions: (brief due to credits) seams not seems ...it is not. I am simply grateful... ...whiskey taste sweeter on the nights you dwell too much. ...more like a living trance. ...too easy, cut and dried acts of evil to prove to us they are foul. But,.. ...an escape. I was lucky, I found one. Would cut a few of the ands out and make new sentences where the contraction is. You never indicate who she is in relation to you, family, friend, imaginary? Just a few quick thoug...
Without any information to go on as far as what this piece is to be (short, novel, essay, etc.) I can only go on the heading Beginning and Middle and assume some things about it. The first issue is probably not your fault but Urbis. There are no paragraph indents that would help with the pacing of the story. It is a bit willy-nilly to read but I suspect it's due to the format. I tend to be a direct writer when I go, being a fan of Papa it is my normal cry of "Simplify!" that I will toss out h...
Very touching. I lost my mother when I was 23 and carrying on much as you when the news of dreaded cancer came, so I can relate completely. As for tats, I have none and really never cared for them on me. I am not adverse to them on others and for a personal devotional to your father, it fits the bill. One note though. Van Gogh's Starry Night is a classic and an interesting choice, but did your father not have any works of his own for copying? Even a kite woudl be an intersting choice if perso...
Typical haiku should blend a little better. Summer thunderstorm doesn't clench into the first lines or the title.
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