karrina's profile

AGE: 29
LOC: Sebastian, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 07

My name is Karrie and I was born in Germany and have lived in quite a few states as I was raised in a military family. I’m a massage therapist and am soon to be going back to school for my physical therapy lisence. In my spare time I write about the strange thoughts that constantly float around my and try to make sence out of them. So far I’ve managed to complete one novel and one short story. They are on completely different ends of the literary spectrum and I’m hoping to get them published some day. If you have any questions please feel free to leave me a message.

Show

Item Stats

Show

Reviewer Stats

Items

Version 1

2 Reviews 1 Comment

Oh what Hell hath delivered me What Soul doth burdened thee Such Tortures of Body and Mind And unfelt Feelings left behind. My Tear held unshed Comforting Words not said My still beating Heart so broken Repeating Memory's only token. My Devil soon comes to claim me My God has long forsaken thee With white Wings clipped and bound To Forever and Always walk the ground. My Beauty ever unchanged Though childish Thoughts had aged Forgotton Wisdom kept untold Yet my Integrity ...

Publishable - Overall

Talent - Overall

Poetry - Overall

Version 1

3 Reviews 3 Comments

Twisted I. ‘Quick! Somebody call a nurse. She’s hurt!’ There! There it is again. Even though I’m here, it still won’t go away. Even in a place like this, where people like me are forgotten by the rest of the world, where we go to get help, I’m still different, not right, not free. And I’ve been here for a long time. I was put here because I was hearing voices, seeing people that nobody else heard or saw. I would hurt myself, my parents said. I knew I did it on purpose sometimes, to let out th...

Talent - Overall

Short Story - Overall

Want to read more

Version 1

3 Reviews 3 Comments

Epilogue I am Samantha Seraph. Sam Angel. I am God’s child. His second born. You may have heard of my brother. He died long ago in a country far away. He was miracle child, he could heal the sick. So could I. He was reborn. So, too, was I. But, unlike my brother, I didn’t believe in my father, or my gift. Until that day, seventy years ago, when I was given freedom. Freedom from my fears and from my doubts. I escaped the one who hated me and I saved the one who loved me. For seventy years I li...

Publishable - Overall

Talent - Overall

Clarity

Attract an Agent and/or Publisher

Short Story - Overall

Version 1

2 Reviews 1 Comment

IV. Pain shattered my skull, sending pulses down my spine. I never even saw what hit me. All I remember is opening the front door, seeing my father and then the world went black. I don’t know what day it is or how long I’ve been here. The room is black and my right temple is throbbing unmercifully. From somewhere in the distance I can hear muffled speaking. It sounds angry, ugly. Trying not to make any noise, I shift to my knees. I’m in a small space. God, I hate small spaces. I must be in a ...

Publishable - Overall

Clarity

Version 1

3 Reviews 8 Comments

III. Nonnie is downstairs. Just go and ask her. Ugh. How can this be so hard? I can’t seem to get myself moving to go and ask Nonnie about applying for the job I read about in the newspapers three weeks ago. I really want the job, something to do after school instead of sitting around like a bum. With a deep sigh of dread, I take myself and the paper clipping of the want ad and try to find Nonnie. She’s alone, sitting at the table in the breakfast nook. One…two…three…’Nonnie?’ The sound is a ...

Publishable - Overall

Talent - Overall

Short Story - Overall

[ View all items ]

Reviews

by oknapp

i gave an eight in best horror cos i haven't read any other horror on the sight. your's is the first...yeah! and i have to say, that as gorey as it was, i thought it was awsome. to me it was like reading a stephen king novel, especially with the way harry sounded in my head. King usually has ass holes in his book and uses foul language to make the story more real, have more grit, and i got the same impression with you. my only suggestions would be to check your grammer. for the most part, dia...

by neverisapromise

i wouldn't put this in the humor section but as maybe an article in the newspaper debate section. for me personally it was kind of harsh. i really hope this isn't your personal opinion and if it is, then i'm sorry. but as for talent, very good. you sound intelligent and the grammer/spelling were great.

by CraziChick

you're playing it too safe with your short stattco sentences. it's also disconcerting to read since there is no rhythym to your story, just bam bam bam. mix up your sentence lengths, it is okay to use run-ons in a story, they draw the reader in. also, when writing dialoge, it becomes a new paragraph. there should be 5 to 6 different indents delineating story line and dialoge. last but not least, add some description. if you're trying to imatate Stephen King, you need to put in some creepy det...

by matteyxx

i have not read the preceeding chapter and parts but what i have read was engaging, clear, and very good. i think some sentence restructuring would be good in paragraph 3, maybe divide between the narrator's thoughts and the second and third person speaking. but either way, great job.

by dailyfukkery

wow, um...not sure how publishable this would be. have to read more. very interesting. question for you- how do you know this:521 U.S., sec. 363, 365? just wondering. other than a couple of grammatical errors i found nothing wrong or anything needing fixing. i loved your sentence structure, very easy to read and it flows nicely. i love that he is constantly trying to outwit a computer, i try and try, but i always fail. keep going.

[ View all reviews ]

Favorites

ITEMS (4)

MEMBERS (1)

by Catastrophe

by KrissiKendall

by gator326

by butterfly323

[ View all ]