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AGE: 32
LOC: Murfreesboro, TN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 06

   I stick my foot in my mouth constantly, I’m a pain, loud, crazy, nice, quiet, mean and selfish at times, I can lose my temper, but be the most patient, I can forget anything I want to, I can read a mind in a look, I can love deeply and helplessly, I can stub my toe and cuss to my hearts desire, I can be stupid and smart in the same breath, I can only be in love with one person at a time, I can cry and yell and still be unhappy, feel good when I work out, I can be messy and neat at the same time, an obsessive compulsive and kickback girl all in one, be young and old, be everything someone wants me to be, but only happy as myself, sing beautiful songs and sound good one day and bad the next, I can run till I’m out of breath, close my he…

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Poetry / Splattered Upon
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2 Reviews   6 Comments
wonderment cannot explain these unending thoughts confused traces of items said one by one upon the mountain of facts words spoken without microscopes and lights, spotted, and focused edges of reality edges of doubt a mind betrayed by wisdoms perceptions Oh, to these words! seeping within my blackened, bruised soul eating the dust, the good, all can you not See! my bloodied head rests upon the tree where you left the throws of passion for something less in the words perpetuated on thin linen ...
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Poetry / Wanderer
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0 Reviews   0 Comments
i'm a wanderer in dreams singing melodies too complex for others too real for the shallow to understand too painful for the weak to handle but all too real for me all that i am in here this life, this dream alone, in my own reality sometimes bad, sometimes good sometimes all in my head it seems and i'm a wanderer stuck in this icicle clawing at glass never hearing your saving grace all i ever wanted lost in you or maybe alive weaving my way through avoiding the claws that tear i think of you...
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Poetry / Prickling
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4 Reviews   8 Comments
  the wind begins brushing my fingers holding my hands out feeling the prickles waiting here for you I feel the wind through these hands I can hear the breeze pass me by but really what does it bring I can't see through my eyes struggle as I look deep but where have you gone illusive hands holding things far away things that I can't reach from here and these hands can only feel the wind brushing these fingers and the rain washing this away till I'm standing here wondering where you've g...
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Poetry / Angel Wings
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8 Reviews   24 Comments
I sometimes think that things can bend that life will be as it aught but sometimes things can never be can never quite hold those things in longing quite contain those dreams we so wished but hold something… As I dream the soft voice of gentle wings all faded and past away brings the landing, lifted for a moment more and then the gentle caress of ground again as this soul, tired, feathered, cold calmly walks away all the while, running shadows of ancient memories lift and swallow all ...
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Poetry / Standing
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8 Reviews   15 Comments
Standing in the street alone, she searches for a direction Will she choose, left or right? Forward or backward? Will she just stand in the center and let the cars pass? She wonders, she waits, and she has no clue which way to turn. She screams in agony at her confused state and yet, there she stays. In the middle of the road. In the middle of the street. With passersby staring, with cars beeping, men and women yelling, "get out of the road!" "Move!" And yet, there she stay...
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Poetry / Okay
This is so close to my heart. I love the raw emotion you capture here. I can feel the anger, hurt, and bitterness of it. Relationships so often end like this, go through these times, and I think many can relate to this. Nothing pops out at me technical wise, although I look more to the choice of words and the emotion expressed in poems. My only suggestion would be that you might look into adding more descriptive words throughout that will add to it's depth. Well done and I look forward to rea...
I love this poem! There are so many images here and I found myself seeing more and more each time I read this. I could feel the tension throughout, building, building until it ends with a releasing shout. I cannot tell you to change anything, it is beautiful...
Poetry / Obloquy.
Oh, how I love this! This is so sad, yet encouraging. I have read of this type of abuse before, often even more brutal, but you have captured just enough to help the reader understand without going into so many gruesome details that we lose interest in shear disgust. You guide the pain and loss so well, as well as the bitter sweetness of this child. I believe this is my most favorite in quite some time. Well done! Here are my only suggestions: "Her body had been vilified [their] house soiled"...
Poetry / Reunited
Oh, the endless struggle we go through at times to fix a relationship that can never be fixed. I loved the images you painted, the way you likened it to a house of cards, the fake smiles, and the frail fantasy of something we want the relationship to be, yet never solid. This is very well done. Here is my only suggestion, and very small :) "We begin each game with [the] hope to rebuild"
Poetry / Pathway Home
This has a lot of feeling. I like how you have used blue/gray then yellow/red. I would suggest that you could delete line 10 because the sky is yellow and red, and bringing in the rain here seems to not fit easily. Or, another idea would be to switch the colors in the lines. Start with yellow/red and end with blue/gray. That seems to fit better into the theme, unless there is some other meaning you were conveying here? It seems to me that you would be blue/gray as he left you? Great job overa...