great poem. Very human in something we all deal with at one time or another.

very clear and touching, I am not a big fan of rhyme, but it works

Very cute story, my nephew Cameron would love this story, try to get it published

great imagery, it seems kind of run on though.

this would make a great spoken word piece, I loved how blunt it was. Alot of pop cultural references which are always great.

Very true, I see this everyday, in myself and others

there is alot of great imagery here, but it is a little hard to follow at times, it is a great example of stream of consciousness prose, but it just needs to be pulled together a little more. But it does deal with some great themes that we all deal with, and I like that, it is very human in its expression. You do have a good sense of rhythem with your words. keep it up

Great flow of words, reminds me of my own style. I love the way it flows, the words fit together very well.