This is so good! You really have a lot of talent for your age! Good stuffy. Can't wait to find out what will happen next! Will Emmaline and Jimmy still be friends? Will James fight with Jimmy? So many things could happen! This is good for your age, still. Bye.

You're right, it isn't very smooth. Work on making it smoother and it will be better, like a lot. I don't like Jmaes. He sounds like a loser. I still think Jimmy and James should fight later. Maybe one of them could die! That would be exciting. I like this story, I think it's really good.

YEAH! This planet is a sham! I get this. This is really good. You should write more because I want to read it. I think this is different and weird and good.

haha i like to spite things. yeah, go to hell death. good job

This is relly sweet. What a nice ode to you cat. You could try less repetition on the fact that you cat is a cat becuase we are all really aware tat ou cat is a cat after the first time you told us. Perhaps you could try some personification or some metaphor so it's less of a narrative. Good job.

My suggestion is to throw it away. This is terrible. It has no point at all. It's dumb. You know the alphabet. So do I. Whatever. Vhatever. Uhever. Thatever. Shatever.