The rhythm of the poem doesn't flow very well, but I like the image that you've captured. It's sweet and to the point, though I can't really decipher what you're trying to say with it. I think the main problem with the rhythm is in the last line, it might work better with an extra syllable.

It's hard to see what exactly you're trying to say about writing poetry. Are you saying that it falls short of actual experience, or that it helps to give meaning to our everyday lives? You're fairly ambiguous about this. The structure is good, although I think the last line stands too much on its own. I'd recomend putting something else before it.

I can't really tell what you're trying to say here. There isn't any sense of rhythm, no repetition of vowel sounds or structure behind the line breaks.

This is pretty interesting, though I don't really follow the "Gallivan Plaza: 200 South" lines. Are these distances to something, or markers? What is the significance of south? I don't think any of this is clear in yr poem. Other than that I think it's great.

This is pretty good. I think you need to break the lines up differently in the last part. For example: burglar alarm sign hangs on an abandoned tool and dye manufacturing plant. twenty foot high barbed wire Other than that it looks and sounds great.

I really like this poem; it's complete. The only recommendation I have would be to elaborate on the "letter from you." Maybe say: "No room for a..." and describe the letter that you're waiting for so that the last line becomes a complete stanza. Maybe beef up the first stanza as well.

I really like the way this is written. You use descriptive and active language, which is really important in my view, and above all you present an interesting theme. I think you could have added to the sense of urgency and suspense by using less articles. For example: He holds his head higher; stage becomes pyre. 10 tired fighters; diamond clown crumbling.

First of all, in my opinion, it's not really a poem if there aren't any line breaks. The general idea is that one line should be no longer than one breath. You should think harder about your choice of words as well. "...regain into my normal state of mind." isn't a correct usage of the word "regain." Also you use both "mind" and "unkind" twice when you could've used something more creative and less repetitive. For instance: "school on my brain" instead of "school on my mind." Also, "stressful...

Very good. When I read it I looked down at my keyboard and imagined all of the letters and numbers replaced with "esc" which I thought was a really cool image. You took that and gave it meaning by illuminating the fact that we write to get away from something else. Brilliant, I wish I wrote it.