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I like the creativity in this poem. The ending is humorous and pleasant. Overall I really liked this poem, and you did a great job. If there is one thing that I would change though, I would stick to the math theme, and take out the descriptive lines or at least change them to be more math related. In my opinion that would really improve the quality of the poem. Great work.

Hmm...I think that you could have done a lot more with this poem length wise. It seems pretty fast paced, and it goes by too quickly for a poem this short. Also, the last line doesn't seem to fit in. Otherwise though, good job and keep trying.

It's a nice quote and is very descriptive. Nice job describing your life as a writer.