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Poetry / Compulsion
by KindredSpirit
Actually, this has a lot of potential idea-wise. Still, you could avoid some things that are too obvious, like lines 2-4. Those cold be used to better describe your feelings and/or the well itself (I was especially surprised at the word "chase" in the 3rd stanza - gave me impression the well was actually very wide) The weakest part is definitely "the light makes..." stanza. Too vague. Says nothing. Concentrate what exactly becomes prettier when lighted - I imagine there are no many things ava...
Poetry / The less I hear you say
by urbanrenewal
tangled through your thighs - through sounds wrong, like it's there just for the sake of alliterations. I believe the picture you were trying to pant was something like "sheets entwined with your thighs" 2nd line - you don't need "of" Overall punctuation could be better. You end all the lines with a punctuation mark and a lot of those, especially commas, are not needed. How long will this game continue, of chess in bedroom stances. - this is too fragmented. You cold go with: How long will it ...
Humor/Satire / Sex and Sensibility -- I-Harmony And You.
by Anonymous
refrigerated overnight. - refrigerate The "kitchen" beginning is well written, made me read the rest. midget tossing - hilarious! I took to the closest women - this is awkwardly phrased: you could find a better verb than took, and also "closest" sounds too vague Princess Lei - Leia I didn't get the Ishmael bit. Overall, you could make it better by making shorter the first part. What definitely stands out here is the "forest" part - funny, and also cool because all of those references (Star Wa...
Short Story / Hugocentric
by Claire_D
Tuesday 13th - powerful, maybe you want to include a year? Anyway, since most suicides statistically happen on Mondays, this speaks about the main character. cheap Homer Simpson tie - cheap not necessary. I believe there are no such ties that are expensive. mythologizing - -ing form destroys the sentence syntactically. outside schools - _everything_ is outside schools (except the school's insides that is), so this is vague, maybe in school yards, behind schools? scrape through in L1.75 - is h...
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Poetry / Trampsex in the ‘80s
by Mikhail_S
Phew! What a ride! I couldn't really isolate my favorite part or expression, because there are too many (OK, hurtlove and sleepsheets was genius), so I'm going to concentrate on those few spots where the poem stumbled for me. 1st line: span hurts this poem. I can't see where the spiders are. 2nd line: stills - same problem. Can mean a dozen different things. Those two word choices are probably the only ones that cause trouble for me in this poem. daze, - this comma is not needed in a non-punc...
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