This piece is very inviting when it says "find euphoria in its despair". When I first read it, I thought the reader would get visuals of a dark destitute place, but in that statement, it seems the reader is supposed to imagine a place of higher magnitude. You change courses in it, which doesn't really allow the reader to grasp the concept of the piece. You do, however, have good ryhme scheme which allows the reader to follow the piece to its ending, which is commendable.

This would have a certain uniqueness to it, if the writer of it is a woman trying to identify with who she is while being a wife and mother, but never being taken seriously. If, however, a man wrote this, it doesnt have any merit

I think if one were to combine everything together in this poem, we would have an individual who is abusing a great deal of substances, but I didn't get the part apart the Queen leaving the castle while they were on a treadmill. Perhaps something more believable in that area would tune the poem up a bit.

The last lines of both stanzas dont have any correlation with one another. A cerebral death means to be brain dead. One can't equate that with being without a breath, as to lose your breath could mean a number of things

This shows the angst of someone who has to keep revising a line or script. The exclamation mark shows they might be stressing a bit over it. You might want to take the exclamation mark away as the word forthcoming does not require an exclamation mark after it.

This poem does allow the reader to experience what is felt like before the experience and after the experience which does make it a complete poem in terms of substance and establishment of mood

This poem does grasp the concept who longs for undeniable relationship and effect of a father in their life. I like the references made to his work pants, and things that a father has or that one can see on their father. Perhaps in the last line, which is the most powerful, one gets the impression a father has been lost.

The last of this poem, is perhaps the strongest line, when the reader learns that depression, not a man, or intruder is knocking at the door, but depression can sometimes seem as if it is an intruder as well. Good use of imagery and contrast.

THe writer of this selection seems to be very fascinated with Mr. Ellis. You describe this in full detail. I'm sure you noticed you didnt spell organization correctly on page 2, but the flow of the fascination with Mr. Ellis is very intriguing. I feel that you were captivated in meeting him and that this is a meeting that will embrace you for a long time. There are some mispellings in this piece, as I pointed out earlier,but as for the fascination with meeting a famous author, i was able to f...