jameswalters's profile

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AGE: 20
LOC: Saint Charles, MO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 12

I’m James. I’m 19 years old and I love writing short stories and occasionally some poetry. Thank you for checking out my stories, if you like what you’ve seen I have more on Myspace at: www.myspace.com/jamesnikka

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Short Story / Dog Versus Snake
Version 1
5 Reviews   1 Comment
<!--StartFragment--> “This is a nice fucking desk,” I said to myself. I looked around my office at all the novelties corporate success had brought. The painting on the wall, by an artist I’ve never heard of, cost $10,000. The cigars I smoke cost $50 each and are ashed into a $1,000 designer glass ashtray. “Life ain’t too bad,” I thought, as I lit another cigar and refilled my glass with scotch. The phone on the desk started to ring on the interior li...
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Short Story / No One is Safe
Version 1
7 Reviews   0 Comments
 Typical Saturday night party. The music is too loud and is starting to give me a headache, but there’s a lot of alcohol and girls, so I’m not complaining. People are everywhere. They crowd all of the rooms, take up all the chairs, yell over the music. I retreat to the kitchen to take shots of whiskey, avoid the crowd, but a group of girls comes in and someone spills a drink while taking pictures for Facebook or Myspace or whatever. The yelling and obnoxiousness from the girl...
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Flash Fiction / A Day to Remember
This was a pretty good read. The character development of the Grandpa was excellently done. I didn't notice any grammatical errors, but I do think you ended it a little bit abruptly. Maybe you could include more detail as to how the mother and grandfather were still able to put the party together. Overall it was very good.
Locked
Pretty good read. The only thing I caught was "To a path where baby tree flourishes in a forest sublime" I think you meant "a baby tree" or "baby trees." Good work!
This was a good read. There was a lot of vivid imagery. I might suggest using periods since you use some punctuation through the rest of the piece. I also find it helps to read through it better but that's really just a personal preference. Other than that good work.
Screenplay / The Little Things
This is a pretty heart warming little piece. There was one thing I caught, when the mother and father are arguing it says "The boys mother is shouting in his father’s face, the boy sits on the stairs watching his mother bawl as he looks eye contact with his father." I think you meant to say "makes eye contact." Other than that it looks like you've got it coming along pretty well.