intimate_le's profile
AGE:
28
LOC: Santa Maria, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 02
LOC: Santa Maria, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 02
I am just a down to earth person who like to express herself through writing so I hope you enjoy what I do and I f you do please let me know what I can do better.
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Everyone has a story. No matter how minute they think they are. For this life is a blessing, Though it leaves many of us scarred. Screaming in pain when we are purged, From our mothers protecting wombs. Trading in a liquid life for an oxygen tomb. With no instructions to keep us on track. While searching for our destinies. Falsely placed dreams, Yes they lead us astray. Our very foundations, Founded on blood and betrayal. Murder, slavery, lies, and distrust. But still we strive to find our pl...
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"Daddy loved: wine, women. Not kids."
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"I took a chance, now what?"
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Tortured souls sing ever so beautifully.
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You look at us eyes full with sympathy Don’t cry for us keep your pity Your tears hold no refuge for us to hide Just like you With the sun we rise This our lot which is dealt out to many We find our joy in each others company We don’t have much But still we have plenty Were at the bottm of the barrel But still were on top Treated diffrently Because we lost A husband and a father Don’t cry for us Keep your pity Because you are few And we are many We’ll cry for you Because we know the things Th...
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i liked your poem. But i felt that it could have been more descriptive. I undestood what you were say. But whit A title like that I expected more depth. Good work.
That was very beautiful. I enjoyed every word. But final line was the best. It's some thing new I have never seen a poetry word search. very inventive and souly creative. Keep up the good work. Hope to see more of your work.
Well, when I began reading your poem started off quite strong. It had beautiful structure, a little diffrent but still structured. but as it went on I noticed you abandoned any kind of form in a desperate attempt to release from your self these feelings that were taunting you. With a little effort you can make this a wonderful poem. Just keep in mind that this isn't just for him it is also a release for you. Good luck.
I like this. you have talent. As I read on I just knew you were going to say blood but you didn't need to. As read I could almost smell the irony substance. good job with the imagery. Hope to see more of your work.
I thought it was cute. When I read it made me feel warm. Like when I watch my favorite cartoon. Nice
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