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AGE: 23
LOC: Hayward, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 04

I’m Vanessa Renee Jugarap Clark. Jugarap is my Mom’s maiden name. She is Filipino, Chinese and Spanish. My Dad is German, Irish and Norwegian. By them I have two younger brothers (20 and 21). I’m a left-handed Aquarius. I was born in Alameda, CA and was raised in Fargo, North Dakota. In my high school years I moved back to California after my parents divorce, where my Mom’s side of the family lives. I went back to Fargo, briefly, at the end of my 10th grade year, and returned to Hayward, Ca, where I finished high school at Mount Eden High. I attended Chabot College for a year and a half -- also in Hayward -- where I was an active member of the school newspaper. I was the features editor for the first two semesters, and my last semester t…

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If I say it's a poem it's a poem if a painter paints with words it's his painting not his prose you follow formats and read about structures to make sure your writings follow procedures -- that works for you but not for me. What makes a poem a poem? Who is the final authority and the say all to make poetry count as poetry? Why do people write? To fulfill an inherent need of our species to be personally understood. We write poetry to vent to release unwind and get these emotions off our chest...
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  Waiting for me to call I can't pick up the phone it's not so heavy but I'm not ready to face that melody   I know you wanna tell me you miss me already I know you'll say you love me and wish me kisses I love you and I miss you dearly already -- but that melody spoken aloud is strong enough to move me to tears and as of now I can't handle that downfall all I need now is to concentrate on my current surroundings and accept that this is my life right now and you can't be apart o...
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Thousands of miles away he cuts into his flesh again carving words like "hate" and "useless" with the wine bottle opener again and again His blood bubbling and trickling on the ground he watches because in the mirror all he sees is worthless You're the root of his pain The father he needed to keep his head straight but back then you were too busy drinking yourself away Never sober enough enough of the time to see the damage you've helped to create One day I'll never for...
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Ignorance is Bliss. Bliss is The Garden of Eden. Knowledge is Power. By the fruit of the tree Eve became emPowered. "And The Serpent said unto the woman, ye shall not surely die: For God doth know that in the day ye eat thereof, then your eyes shall be opened, and ye shall be as gods, knowing good and evil." [-Genesis 3:4-5; King James Version] "…a tree to be desired to make one wise, and [Eve] did eat, and gave also unto her husband with her; and he did eat....
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Poe et tis u knight us La Vey had it right -- the here and the now cum save us tonight. Her ethics cum her elders for change and transform the mas o chists can't hurt anymore. In tangeled and vain flee from the norm -- the Holy War's pawns no more. Androids sheep flock -- run! the shepherds been bought your bed is your lot mine is my rest till death I am gone. From dusk till dawn.
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how do u figure everyone is 'entitled' to another chance? short poem, you get the emotion across well with it though. i liked the overall flow.
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i like the use of magical carousel. i like the wispyness of this poem. i think the ending "The light in your eyes The joy in your smile The warmth in your kiss And my eyes are closed As you kiss me Tenderly Holding onto my hand And my heart" feels generic though. not very original. sometimes generic works, but here it's just too simplistic. i found it hard to really feel the emotion in the poem.