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Your poem is nice and sounds very deep. I'm not much of a poetry person but I do enjoy a couple here and there. Good job and keep up the good work!

This is pretty random and all over the place. I recommend that you structure yourself a bit. However, I'm not much of a poetry person and it could just be my personal bias.

This was very descriptive. At first it caught me off guard because I did not notice the parenthetical "Erotica" warning. Thankfully, I'm not so inexperienced in reading such scenes that I should turn away from it. You are obviously a good writer, and the explicit scene was well...explicit. “You don’t know that Col, he knows who I am! I used to bring fresh muffins to his neighbor, Mrs. Flaherty, remember?” The "fresh muffins" part sent me laughing; it was just too funny how you brought it up r...

Nice use of the bird as a metaphor. The flow is a little of but overall it was sweet.

This is a very deep piece. Keep it up!