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LOC: Sachse, TX
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Hangar 18 “A sunset over little ole’ Clovis, New Mexico. One of the greatest scenes that most people never see,” commented my friend Dave. We were about to take his small single engine aircraft out over the desert to watch the sun set over the hills. I stepped up into the passenger side as Dave heaved the prop to get it spinning. After a few clicks, a putt, and a cough, the engine roared to life and we taxied down the runway. Once in the air, we turned west and headed for the desert. We flew ...
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Hangar 18 “A sunset over little ole’ Clovis, New Mexico. One of the greatest scenes that most people never see,” commented my friend Dave. We were about to take his small single engine aircraft out over the desert to watch the sun set over the hills. I stepped up into the passenger side as Dave heaved the prop to get it spinning. After a few clicks, a putt, and a cough, the engine roared to life and we taxied down the runway. Once in the air, we turned west and headed for the desert. We flew ...
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Your lack of capitalization and punctuation really bring across the point you are trying to make. If you had capitalized words, it would counteract the idea of the writing. If you really wanted to add something, put a long/hard to spell word in there, in misspell it. That's about the only that you could do to help this piece out.
Very interesting subject you chose to write about. Little hard to follow, but other than that I like it
Is the obvious lack of all capitalization on purpose? The story is hard to follow, and it doesn't seem to have a point to it. It's kind of just THERE. Not much to it. More of a clip than a short story, as nothing really happens. It's also really hard to follow the characters through the sentences. "cross the street lindsay is just getting railed by kevin who is cheating on tracy who is at mike’s…not carlie’s. just then frank slams on his brakes just in time to spare marty who was chasing phil...
This may be a lot deeper than I perceive it to be, but the more I look at it, the more I see. The message could probably be displayed in a better medium though. A Haiku simply doesn't have enough space to fully convey the feelings behind it and leave a lasting impact
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