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AGE: 24
LOC: Tampa, FL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: March 12

I’m a computer science major who sometimes writes things.

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  He stood over six meters tall, his shiny blue metallic body glistening in the afternoon sun. KatamariSuzuki Super-Robot® had an electronic snout that could sense enemies from a half-kilometer away, and he used this ability with great aplomb. It was on this day that he felt the presence of another robot in the city. Pulling his mechanical sword from its sheath on his back, he started running in the direction of the intruder, smashing cars and buildings as he ran faster and faster. A...
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Short Story / Hobby Rocketry
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There were times in Nomad360’s life when he wished he weren’t such a talented genius. This was not one of those times. Or maybe it would be if he were on the outside looking in at himself, but he was not. He was building a spaceship in his back yard, and was quite absorbed in his task. It was not literally his back yard of course. There was probably some regulation against that. No, this was in the woods down the road from where he worked as a sanitation engineer, and it was going...
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Short Story / Gadget Lust
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  Gordon32 picked up the screwdriver on his way to work and immediately felt better about himself and his abilities. The screwdriver had over 203 separate capabilities and came with a user’s manual that was two centimeters thick. Gordon32 loved user’s manuals that were really thick. Not that he would ever read the entire thing, but the fact that he had purchased something laden with such untold complexity that it required such a lengthy instruction manual gave him a sort of u...
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Short Story / Erl
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  FlamePotato sat in the empty void waiting for contact. He checked his mail. Nothing new. He browsed through his old mail several times. Some of it was very old, and he had no idea what to do with any of it. He picked up one piece that had been sent to him ages ago. It looked like half of a smiley face and had a bunch of incomprehensible numbers underneath it. Below that was the phrase “over to law,” which seemed oddly out of place. There was another piece of mail that had a...
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Short Story / Closed Time-like Curves
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  And she tasted it. It tasted metallic and bitter somehow. But she ignored that because to her, it tasted like opportunity. Time was like that sometimes. There was only a few different ways for spacetime to taste, and this taste meant that it had been untouched by matter. She swished it around in her mouth a bit, just as her little way of doing a victory dance. Then NagaReaper took off her enhanced sensory experience helmet and turned her attention to the main control array of her vesse...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Blood Legacy [Chapter One Pt 2]
First thought: reminds me of the beginning of A New Hope. That being said, it's very well written, crystal clear prose, sharp and smart. "A ship the size could easily carry twice the people this one did." I am confused here as to whose ship could carry twice the people of whose. You misspelled "decision's" at the end; which was a strange burp of dyslexia given the extremely competent style of the rest of the story. Definitely doesn't suck. Very good, looking forward to more.
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Memories
I can completely absorb what you are saying. You definitely get your thoughts across well, and have no trouble expressing yourself. What I don't understand is the pseudo-poetic framework you've placed your ideas in. It almost works, but the rhythm is completely lost in the last line. I would either redo the lines in a prose style and add a few linking sentences in, or reconsider how the last line is going to work in a poem. You've got to decide.
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Poetry / Poetic Justice
A valiant attempt. I think you need to become a bit more familiar with your own vocabulary before trying a poem this long. There isn't much flow, and your rhymes seem a little forced. That being said, keep trying. Perhaps start out smaller, something shorter.
Poetry / Our Dream
Good stuff, very dream-like, in a specific way. For some reason the word "pleasant" strikes me as a weak word in the midst of the rest of the imagery. Probably just a copy/paste issue, but "throughopen" needs a space.
Flash Fiction / No Love for Lana
Really good. I had to read it twice because I was confused as to whose idea it was to get the bot and who was opposed to it, but that is more my ADD than your writing style. It was very tight, and unlike other drabbles all of your words need to be there, and it doesn't seem like you just deleted words in the middle of sentences to fit into the guidelines. Good stuff.
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