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LAST LOGIN: November 28
LAST LOGIN: November 28
to explain a little of what many find annoying about my writings – most of them are attempts to capture feelings or reactions…experiences through the eyes of any given participant. they may seem chaotic at times…i understand that frustrates some. also, most of my writings are actually songs, so there’s a rhythm i try my best to display with spaces and punctuation. i’m happy to answer any questions you may have.
i don’t capitalize my sentences, i don’t tend to write about pretty things and i’m almost always interested in the thoughts of others. c’mon…tell me what you think.
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the curve of appealing the weekend revealing a warmth deep and endless no one would believe this is callused and caustic abashed strong and wall-less the thrust of the steady she’s warm, sweet and ready
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alarms go off when standing near you warning signals screaming disconnect and silence rushes towards me as I attempt to redirect my fingers and my focus in you mimicking the quite familiar few dancing back and forth I’m frozen… here as it pits the fight and flight against me shapes evolving blue diverse, I’m trapped and seeking universal draw but just as quickly once began, now shimmers with the waving hand then diplomatic patient stance is ushered to the face and lost is that most recent cha...
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the sad thing about knowing things the way i know them is that i only know them for that second...anything i've ever said, written, mumbled in my sleep was only there for that moment - and then *poof* nothing it's no wonder i flounder back and forth for days at a time with the smallest piece of information...no matter how rubix i am...all i'm doing is biding time until the epiphany...the bright spot in the middle of the tunnel. maybe i should learn to juggle instead... rocking back and forth ...
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mercury is after me it’s personal, he says for the time…at the party I made him wear that fez mercury has it in for me he told me so, last night no stone unturned, no shadow fall he says, no bark, just bite c’mon boys, a plane to catch I’m meeting him off shore for fifteen morning glory seeds he’ll bother me, no more mercury is after me it’s personal, he says for the time…at the party I made him wear that fez
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the road is long and wears, at times, heavy there’s no place to stop for quite some time the sores are ignored through midnight snores and echoes keep me company outdoors the fog creeps inside for days at a time as frustrations mount and anchor twine crass and cradling amidst re-labeling dragging ankles over and out of reckoning it’s the slow and steady tearing up that blocks the view of things to come from scarring knees to meet the needs of dancing down the ancient seeds of love.
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as a lover of people watching, myself, this piece resonates with me. I appreciate the way it ends when it needs to, no grand display, no final gesture, just the last thing that needs to be said. well done, a solid and intriguing piece. thanks!
an honest, abrupt and captivating explanation of what could even be a one night stand. it wouldn't matter for the story goes no further than this single act. well done.
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I cannot outdo the outstanding reviews previous - so I will do my best. The imagery in this piece is outstanding, with a baited breath unspoken, it certainly maintains the reader's attention. I like the typeface size change, it makes the middle of the piece seem more personal, like a whipser or a secret - more than the rest. it is a timely piece, something many people can identify with, and in that, it holds strength above and beyond its words. as usual, an excellent piece on your part...than...
an excellent piece, both vivid and in control of it's rhythm. the staggered stutters keep my attention while moving towards the next stanza. i'm not sure if this is helpful or not, but it's well done. i look forward to reading more of your work.
nice portrayal of movement in the unknown. the repitition helps, like a bicycle wheel with a dent that keeps coming around and reminding you to fix the crimp in your style. i'd challenge some aspects to dig deeper, but i think that's just me. it is a complete story as it stands now. thanks!
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