Right off the bat, your biggest problem right now is punctuation. The structure of your sentences isn't bad, but you're missing commas and things. Other than that, her thoughts seemed a little unnatural; it should be more like dialog, and maybe not even full ideas or sentences - people usually speak with contractions, and thoughts are highly informal at the best of times. So, my advice is to proofread for style things and for punctuation.

Description and everything is okay, but the theme is weird; it doesn't feel like you've captured your friend, because this could apply to a hundred different people (aside from liking cars and anime both). If you took out "A young person with a twisted mind", maybe it would fit better. Also, if Finus is his real name, that's cool - but it seems more like a penname or something.

I read the first two paragraphs of this and nothing has happened. You know how to write, which is refreshing, except you get lost in your descriptions, lingering too long on things that are relatively insignificant. There are at least two typos (a repeated word and period that should be a comma), so my advice would be to read through this again, trim it up, and proof it for errors. Otherwise, it's nice that someone here has a decent grasp of the English language. Most of the things I'm readin...

I'd suggest changing "suited" to "suit" because it does weird things with the tense. Since there is no other verb and you have the phrase 'current bestseller', it puts it in unshakable present tense as far as the reader's impression goes. Aside from that, I'm not sure that this is really saying anything profound. You're implying that purpose of all literature is simply to make money, but I'm not actually sure that's intentional. Otherwise it kind of feels like "a book is useful to its writer'...

You make an effort to rhyme when this would be better suited to free-form. You're right, it does read a bit like a short story, and this does not flatter it. One of the most important things a poem can have structurally are meter or some kind of magic about the chosen words. What you have is a narrative with some out-of-place rhymes and no rhythm. It's very good to try things you don't usually do, like writing poetry when you normally write prose, and I applaud the effort. I think if you trie...

Death seems a bit of a narrow focus, especially if this is meant to represent life as an artistic person. However, if your meaning is that "death is imminent and unstoppable," and it's about looking forward to something that can't be changed, then it's a little better. Otherwise, my impression of this is "I can't wait to die," and it isn't very moving.

A lot of entries do seem to be clusters of descriptive phrases, and though that isn't necessarily a bad thing right off the bat, it's easiest, and so you see a lot of it. The only thing I don't like about this is that, while you have a small bit of continuity from "night -> day -> forever (sort of, on the last one)", the transition from "writer -> teacher -> learner" is even less direct. I'd focus a little bit more on the overall theme.

Not bad, and I like how it embodies the idea of a 'starving writer'; even if you do something fantastic, getting reimbursed for it is a little trickier. I'd suggest altering it to "Wrote great novel. Did not sell," because they are both already fragments and the 'no sale' is a little too ambiguous. Also, it balances it a bit better.

What makes this weak is that it relies on the title for context. Otherwise, I think if you tweaked your words a bit (maybe 'murder' instead of killer, because killer is a bit too clean-sounding?), and tried to make it stand alone, you'd have a more powerful message.

If it's from the parent's point of view, it's a bit refreshing. Otherwise, it's a little tiresome. And the format may need to be tweaked; like "Eggs hatched. Empty nest - what next?" Instead of just a comma, because it seems a bit abrupt after the first clause is sufficiently ended; the last four words seem rushed. It's much better than many of the other entries, though.