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If it's from the parent's point of view, it's a bit refreshing. Otherwise, it's a little tiresome. And the format may need to be tweaked; like "Eggs hatched. Empty nest - what next?" Instead of just a comma, because it seems a bit abrupt after the first clause is sufficiently ended; the last four words seem rushed. It's much better than many of the other entries, though.

What makes this weak is that it relies on the title for context. Otherwise, I think if you tweaked your words a bit (maybe 'murder' instead of killer, because killer is a bit too clean-sounding?), and tried to make it stand alone, you'd have a more powerful message.

Not bad, and I like how it embodies the idea of a 'starving writer'; even if you do something fantastic, getting reimbursed for it is a little trickier. I'd suggest altering it to "Wrote great novel. Did not sell," because they are both already fragments and the 'no sale' is a little too ambiguous. Also, it balances it a bit better.

A lot of entries do seem to be clusters of descriptive phrases, and though that isn't necessarily a bad thing right off the bat, it's easiest, and so you see a lot of it. The only thing I don't like about this is that, while you have a small bit of continuity from "night -> day -> forever (sort of, on the last one)", the transition from "writer -> teacher -> learner" is even less direct. I'd focus a little bit more on the overall theme.