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AGE: 15
LOC: Keller, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 29

hey ya’ll my names lauren im 15 and a junior in high school i live in killer keller texas! my friends told me to use this site to put up my stuff so there ya go. Hope ya like what i have but if not oh well.

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Version 2
9 Reviews   2 Comments
The sounds of the darkness were everywhere. The chirping of the crickets. The calls of the crows. The howls of the wolf. They surrounded him on all sides. Left, right, In front, behind, above. I must find a way out. As long as shes safe. That’s all that matters right now. Her safety. She’s the last hope. “You can’t run from me, Derek. You never could. Hand her over. There is no hope for you.” A bodiless voice stated calmly as if it knew everything going through the young mans head. “I’ll find...
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Lyrics / this is me
Version 1
1 Review   3 Comments
Look into my eyes and tell me wat u see Do you see all the glory all thefame that came to be Can you see my passions Running through my head Can u tell all the thoughts that I have yet to give So tell me what u see Can you tell this was meant to be Can u see all that we can be Everyone needs to see this is me I tried for so long to be who they wanted They were always in control They would never let go I needed to break free Be who I am I wanted to go back to the things I had planned So tell m...
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Version 1
3 Reviews   4 Comments
The sounds were everywhere. They surrounded him on all sides. Left, right, In front, behind, above. “You can’t run from me, Derek. You never could. Hand her over. There is no hope for you.” “I’ll find a way!” He yelled to the darkness. ”There’s always a way! You’ll never find her!” Derek laughed at the Darkness. “Have you become so weak that you can’t even sense her? Or could it be she’s so powerful already that it’s impossible?” Silence. Nothing moved. No wind. No Bird calls. “You’ll never ...
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Poetry / cant let go
Version 1
0 Reviews   0 Comments
I can’t let go Your memories stays It tears me apart Day by day I try to let go I want to move on I just couldn’t believe it You left; your gone It’s still in pieces This heart you denied But ill keep trying Though I’m terrorized Ill wake in the morning And rise with the dawn Ill leave you behind And start to move on
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Poetry / The Sonnet
shows the stress a lot of writers face when they have writers block but it could use a little more than that explain more about how the person couldnt find anything to write about
Lyrics / fame
all i can really say is...damn! you had feeling and meaning and it i enjoyed reading it. i know im suppose to critize and ill probably get n2 trouble for not doing it but i cant find nething wrng with that piece! it had rythem, it flowed, it rymed(;p) and it grabbed my attention!
Novel Treatments / excerpt
im just a little confused...what did you mean by THAT day and the whole 'Then quietly asked God that if, upon returning, would You recognize my bones?'? it starts off phenominal though. great detail. i like how you question god it shows that hes really thinking about this. keep going with this and if you get more let me know! im intrigued!
not bad but it could use a little more detail. it says in the title tra(i)ns..why did you put that? this doesnt say anything about a train what-so-ever.
one word...what? made sense if your doing human anatomy but other than that no. it could hav been a little longer and no the strokes aren't always the same. talk about how it speeds up at certain times or something make it more interesting