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LOC: Maryville, IL
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LAST LOGIN: September 13
LOC: Maryville, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 13
Hello.
For those who are interested, my name is Matt. I have always had a passion for the writing trade and like so many others, hope to become published. I also aspire to write screenplays. The movies Hollywood is putting out today make me sick. Big names, big special effects and a little skin seem to make millions upon millions. I would like to add a little bit of class to the big Hollywood machine. I will admit, I may be a little slow here initially; this is the first group/site I’ve ever joined, so I hope y’all will like my work.
Cheers,
Matt
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There was an incredibly bright flash of light in the room which blinded everybody except Waters, who created the light, and was, therefore, prepared for the burst of Sun-like light. In that one instant, all six intelligent personages simply disappeared from that particular room. *** This is the first of many Time issues of this story. The second hand on the clock in Jake and Jesse’s living room actually clicked only once, but in that one second two very important things happened; one being a ...
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Definition of awkward moment: being in a house with four of your friends, stoned off your asses, with some strange, grizzled looking man wearing a dirty brown robe staring you all down. This is the situation that Jake, Jesse, Donny, Billy and Pez were facing. Jake, having let the old man into the house felt compelled to speak. “I am Waters,” said the old man. “Watcher of the Frogs.” Jake’s eyes widened and he grinned. “Woah ho ho,” is all he could muster. The others, after a second, took up J...
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Jake squinted against the sunlight coming through the small crack in the curtains. Satisfied that the loud noise he’d heard was his brothers beat up Camaro, Jake sat back down. By the time his eyes had readjusted to the dark room, Billy and Jesse were through the front door. Jesse had a grim look on his face. “Well?” Jake asked. “No dice, dude,” Jesse said convincingly. Billy was also shaking his head. “Fuck!” yelled both Jake and Donny Williams (still not related). Now this isn’t something y...
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Jake and Jesse Williams gave each other an annoyed look as they sighed a breath of relief. The pounding on the door was now accompanied by laughter. Jake shook his head and unlocked the front door as Jesse sank into his recliner, and lit a cigarette. The door opened and the heat came into the house as did Jake and Jesse’s friends, Donny, Billy, and the police imposter, Richard Lopez, or Pez, as he was known. After being thumped on the head, Pez followed the order given to him by the head thum...
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Before we go into the actual events of the story, please allow me to explain just one more matter of the cosmos, or rather, dimensea. You see, the greatest force of all things known is the mind. Dealing with dimensea is not an easy matter, in fact, it takes what’s known as “The Highest Form Of Intelligence‿ to realize the potential of the mind. The term dimensea is commonly known in the dimension in which you do not exist as a false belief, ironically that one does not exist, or sometimes eve...
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An honest piece. I like that. This one reminds me of something I wrote a long time ago called "Lighter Klepto". Pretty much the only thing I got out of this was humor. How the hell does anyone go about stealing a bat, a chinchilla, a snake, and a panther??? Odd, but very funny.
Interesting piece here. I also like to develop characters by putting them together and throwing different obstacles together. You have some interesting characters here, and they are starting to develop a few good conflicts. I suppose, overall, I'd like to read more about Henry. He was the most underdeveloped character in this entire piece, but he seemed like he had a lot of depth. Anyway, keep writing. Hopefully we'll see these characters in a story someday.
I am genuinely impressed with this one. The beginning was incredibly slow and was almost a chore to get through. The story really hit a good pace after Elise left the graveyard. You brilliantly captured the feeling of lonliness and despair, especially in the very beginning of the story, which is why I don't advise you to shorten your intro. You do, however, need some bang at the beginning to draw in your readers. Your characters were great, though Gabe seems like he should be a little older t...
This was wonderfully delightful. Anyone who reads this and doesn't smile should be on the receiving end of a horse drawing, immediately followed by a quick quartering. I absolutely loved the "side note regarding history". I did manage to find a couple issues for you to address: "It was a fine spring day in England that day," You should probably drop "that day". ...he would use his angry as a catalyst... Angry should be anger. Again, great writing. Two thumbs way up. If you're ever in my part ...
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