Since you're new, I want to say just really quickly, congrats on discovering the wonderful world of poetry. Now, onto your poem, and I will try to be nice, but helpful =) The first time I read this poem, admittedly I felt as if it did not fit together very well, however, when I reread it, I heartily enjoyed the rushed "stressed" feeling that the poem itself possesses. Just by the rhythm and tone of the poem, I could have detected the stress without your ever using the word. In short, very goo...

I really enjoyed reading this short story. Your development of the character Shane is excellent. I don't usually like first person narrators, but you did an excellent job of keeping your character from sounding whiny or like a know it all. Your plot and descriptions are very interesting and kept me wanting to continue reading it until the very end. Your descriptions are like a tall glass of lemonade on a hot day - refreshing. Very creative. Too many story writers get stuck in simple, repetiti...

I'm going to try to stay pretty specific with this review. First of all, I would suggest that you don't start every sentence with a name or pronoun. Most of your sentences were "She did this," or "Bev went here," which gets a little monotonous. Try different ways of starting your sentences, like with a prepositional phrase, or different kinds of grammatical structures so that your reader doesn't read the story with a monotonous rhythm. Secondly, I think you went just a little too fast with th...

I like it. It really sums up what most people who write stories or poems hope will happen. Very well summed-up.

Haha! YES! This sums up what every author prays to whomever god they believe in before they sit down at their keyboard or with their pen! Fantastic! If you had one to address writer's block to go with this, it would be perfect.

I like this. Very moving, and for lack of a better adjective, very poetic. I like the way you typed it in rhythm. The imagery you use is very articulate and gives the reader the mental image you wish to portray. Very well written.

I like your use of capitol vs lowercase letters. It really makes your points stand out and brings emotion more pointedly into the words that are written. I like your rhythm and subject matter. Well written.

I like this, I think it well-sums up not only what many authors feel about their work, but what many people feel about themselves. Very well put.

Ha ha! I love it. It really captures the emotion of someone who tries too hard for years trying to please everyone else, then wakes up and realizes that it's not worth it and they should just . . . stop. And relax. Well worded and well written.

First of all, I love the title of your piece. Very appropriate and very true. This line, is priceless: "I cannot tell you how far gone I am but I know there’s something sick about hearing sounds like sexual ecstasy escaping one's lips over a cup of coffee." I loved that. Very humorous. Great ode to coffee as well. It is the only thing that makes mornings worthwhile, after all. Very good, humorous satire. I enjoyed reading it and think you did a great job writing it. Also, this isn't exactly r...