well written cute ending,

needed me this I knew ... a comma after me I think it went a bit choppy, if you reread it aloud to yourself, fixing anything that sounds off.

human man on the top, neat well drawn out

I think your word usage is suberb, and the story leads you to want to know more.

Well I liked all the rain stuff, great start for a book and Id like to read more, stick me in friends if you like.

“Mr. Beasley at your service.” .. I think you could cut the Mr. Beasley A ten from me, I love the theme, I really liked ow sarah was not scared to watch her bitch aunt get murdered.

not sure why you didnt capitalize your 'i''s I liked the story I think the wording was too peotic for my taste. it is good as is but to make it more a story alot needs to be reworded so it flows better.

Wonderful. First line made me laugh. I belike a few weeks ago I read a previous version of this. I must say this one towers over the old. well done. Can only give 8 because of length. so far so good

Its easy to tell you have good experience. This just reads easy. Is it a collection of small stories like these? I would think that could work if there was a central connection. Im assuming these are all true, which earns bonus points frome me. And I wish we would of knew how hot the chick was who had the tattoo. big diff between whether id like to do her or not. kind of important. good luck