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17
LOC: Bishopville, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 16
LOC: Bishopville, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 16
Um… I sit in my room, listening to music while I write and read. I love magic and stuff like that. I’m your typical goth/emo kid, just trying to survive highschool. I’m quiet and stick to myself a lot, besides my friends.All my work comes from my subconcous mind and dreams.So… whatever.
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“Oh thank God!” Kat said as she opened the door. Tanya heard the clicks of locks, the thuds of dead bolts, and the rattling of chains. Kat was paranoid and had installed extra precautions when she moved in. After what seemed like forever, the door opened to show a distressed girl of about 21 with dark red-brown hair that fell to her shoulders and bright, emerald green eyes. But her eyes were troubled and her hair was in disarray. Tanya slipped in and hugged her friend, who broke d...
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She ran for her life, not knowing if she would succeed. Everything was so new to her in this realm and this was just too much information to process. And now this beast was chasing her for God knew what. And that’s how she got to where she was now, running with no idea where she was going or what she was going to do. Everything blurred together before all of a sudden, the ground was no longer below her. She screamed, realizing that she was free-falling straight over the edge of the moun...
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He walked through the streets, not paying attention to what he was doing. He looked up when he reached the small brick wall that he quickly crouched behind. He was at his favorite food place. Well, sort of. He peeked over and saw that a couple was leaving and crouched, ready to spring up and grab the leftovers; some bread, half a taco, and some chips. He would throw it all into the bread basket and then take the little wax paper with him. Sure, it was petty theft but who really cares about le...
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It’s becoming to much pressure I can’t even begin to measure Oh, please tell me, really honey How in the world is this funny? You think it’s called being sly I call it walking out, saying bye Why must I be there? All I want is to be here In this room with a bed Please, hit me on the head Don’t press, oh God, don’t press I’m already stressed My hair is falling out Can’t I pout? I’m being pressed, Becoming stressed.
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Wow, the emotion coming from this is great. The style is awesome and the plot is thrilling. It grabs the reader from the first sentence and won't let go. I hope that you keep it up and finish on this piece. It is great and I want to know what happens with Lukas and Ellie. It is a great plot and story line. Keep it up! Flamebringer15
It is very well written and the mood is nice and calm. I think that it was really written to express gratitude, but that is just me, as a reader. The imagery is fantastic and well drawn out so that it isn't too much but just enough and the reader has enough room to think of looks and settings themselves. Keep up the great writing! Flamebringer15
I like the meter and the mood. It is well written and gets the readers' attention. Very well done in my opinion. One thing is that it is not very clear, but that could be intentional. It definitely leaves room for the imagination to explore. Keep up the great writing! Flamebringer15
The reader can feel the pain and the mood is set well. The wording is very well done but the piece isn't very clear. But all in all, it is very good. It makes the reader think and explore thier own thoughts. I love the line, '...we are all dying in November...' because everything starts to shut off and die in November for autumn and winter. It is very well drawn out. Keep up the great writing! Flamebringer15
Your wording hooks the reader from the first sentence. You can feel the emotion and anticipation of the characters. They are well rounded and thought out. There were not many grammatical errors that I saw and I would love to read more. Keep up the great writing! Flamebringer15
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