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Novel Treatments / Mind for Lease
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3 Reviews   0 Comments
Hunter had known her secret for a long time; even before he had fallen in love with her. He had figured something was odd about her, and when confronted, she had told him, because she knew she could trust him. But that wasn’t a necessarily a testimony to how he treated people; it was because she knew. She knew a lot of stuff. Angel Frederickson could reach into your mind and pull out the information she needed, without a thought to morality or basic human rights. He wasn’t sure she was human...
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Romance / Anomaly
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3 Reviews   1 Comment
Tender kisses on bloody lips, The saint and the sinner forevermore, I am the girl that likes to rebel, I fight, I curse, I generally raise hell, I laugh at the boy that will not hit back, I am quite certain I know what I lack, I push away the pretense of sanity, Though I take great stock in my vanity, So how am I the girl for him? The girl that makes his world spin? But for now I would like to be, The anomaly.
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Poetry / Hall of Doom
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8 Reviews   0 Comments
Punding footsteps echo through, This empty, spacious hall of doom, Never stop to look behind, You are warned; there is no more time, What have you done? Look around, no one cares, no one, This is the depths of the deepest hell. You cannot see, hear, touch, taste, or smell, You are another face in a sea of faces, No one and everyone, they remain the same, Welcome to school.
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / By Myself
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10 Reviews   5 Comments
So here I am, sitting in the middle of Redneck, USA, wondering who the hell put me here and whether I can sue them. But then I remember my mother put me here, and I would probably lose my allowance if I sued her. So everyday I am put up to the excruciating pain of seeing shirts that proclaim, "Cowboy butts drive me nuts" or "Southern by the grace of god" or, my personal favorite, "Adam and Eve not Adam and Steve". I have finally learned to keep my mouth shut, however. I will not make some sa...
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Novel Treatments / St. Lucifer Chapter One
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6 Reviews   9 Comments
Markie Holland sat quietly by the edge of the pond that bordered her house, its soft splashes against the dock relaxing. A rickety old row boat was tethered to it, with the name Star Fire. Her bright blue eyes closed drowsily under the beating sun. She didn’t notice the young man who had appeared at her side, almost out of nowhere. “Beautiful day, isn’t it?” he said. Her eyes snapped open and she rocketed to her feet like a cannonball. “Who’re you?” she demanded, backing away slowly. “A frien...
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Well, your point I agree with, whole-heartedly. But- "with multiple women approach because they wear purity rings" - Maybe you meant "with the multiple women approaching"? (Although, on a side note, you should remember that they are Disney-marketed, but a couple of them are legally adults, right? The whole purity ring thing is likely to be a publicity stunt.) "to media glorifies it and other things" - Instead, I'm guessing it should be "so the media glorifies it, among other things". Miley Cy...
Poetry / I Live
This is great! The contast is good, but maybe a little contradictory especially since you say "I live to hate" and "I live to love"....but maybe that's just me.
Young Adult / Holding On Pt.1
To be honest, I have no clue what is going on here. A lot of this doesn't make sense, because it seems like, in beginning, they have to get to Mel's because of some big, frightening event. You actually use the words 'urgent' and 'frightened', but then it turns out to be nothing. The whole scene with Mel is confusing, because with the phone call, it says she listened to HIS words. Even without the gender/name confusion, it's rushed and doesn't make sense. The whole thing is very rushed, and de...
Novel Treatments / Homophobia High: Prologue
Okay, the idea is really good, and while I get that it's a journal, it would be better if it was written well. You throw all this information in there really randomly, and use the word 'wahoo' out of nowhere......It needs a lot of work, but the potential is totally there. (And, I'm a teenager, too, for the record, who lives in Redneck, USA, where I am too much a of a liberal dirty hippie for everyone else.)
Lyrics / Lay Down Child
These were fantastic. The lack of capitalization and punctuation was kind of frustrating, but I get that it's meant to be performed and not read.
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Poetry / I Live
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