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Non-fiction / Time Change
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Every once in awhile the clock on my computer reverts to British time, and sometimes it shocks me for a minute - have I really been reading until 5am? Usually it's just a minute annoyance; a little detail to be fixed between MSN messages. Which is fine, except that it reminds me that I'm here and not there. It's strange to think that I spent nearly all year five hours ahead. And that although I've gotten older since coming back, I'm now living five hours behind. By some odd trick of geography...
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Short Story / Rain
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He sits on his porch staring at the rain. It’s summer, and another storm triggered by heat and humidity has amassed above his house, his kingdom. He sits on his porch keeping sentry, allowing himself to be close to the chaos so that the domestic calm behind him is felt more deeply. If it weren’t for the dark nothing would ever seem light. It’s calming watching the rain. This is no passive process; this is an unravelling of thoughts and the day’s stresses. He’s an ineffective perfectionist. H...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Melissa is in her bad luck dress.
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Melissa is in her bad luck dress. It’s a pretty innocuous looking dress – almost elegant, definitely girlish and a pretty colour on her. It swishes when she walks and shows off her shoulders. It was relatively inexpensive. It was a surprising choice to some of her older friends. Melissa is a jeans and band shirt kind of a girl. She is a sceptic and an atheist, a rational former anti-girl. Beautiful, romantic dresses that vaguely resemble a ballet costume should not be in her closet, even if i...
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Short Story / Fishtail 2
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The crash was quick, so quick that Jane might have missed it if she hadn’t been so unfortunately in the front seat. It was storming out. The sky had that dull yellow glow as it spat down lines of rain, immediately becoming warped by the wind. The clouds were ominous, and the scene chaotic. It was like the intro to a horror movie and it made Jane shiver. It made the road slick, made her car slip and slide down the snaky asphalt. She was on her way home from an afternoon of the latter; some of ...
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Non-fiction / Time Change
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Every once in awhile the clock on my computer reverts to British time, and sometimes it shocks me for a minute - have I really been reading until 5am? Usually it's just a minute annoyance; a little detail to be fixed between MSN messages. Which is fine, except that it reminds me that I'm here and not there. It's strange to think that I spent nearly all year five hours ahead. And that although I've gotten older since coming back, I'm now living five hours behind. By some odd trick of geography...
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Haiku/Senryu / Long Ago
It's a beautiful image, and I like the continuation between the first and second line. However, it isn't particularly original, but it does convey a kind of nineteenth century romanticism.
For a random peice of writing it's pretty good. I have to say, as a 22 year old who can no longer think up plotlines, I kind of identified with this. It's funny because I still feel like a kid. I'm not sure if we're just supposed to criticize the writing or the thoughts themselves (which seems a little invasive), but there were a couple of things that I disagreed with. It's a little trite to refer to the "children are so innocent" theme. Remember being seven? Remember the bullies? Remember be...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Perpetuity
I liked it. It sounds like you have a really good concept of self, which I guess is the point of having a journal in the first place. It's an interesting concept that you've chosen to explore as well - it's like thinking of all the different stranger's photos you might be in. I didn't really see the connection however with the first paragraph and the rest of the writing. The first sentence on the second paragraph is probably a good enough introduction. I think another thing to watch for, part...
Definitely amusing in a quirky kind of way! This is something I could potentially see on a Hallmark card. Don't know if I totally agree with you though - the desire and love of innovation and improvement shouldn't totally be totally discounted. Being satisfied is good, settling isn't always. But again, it was cute, quirky, and an interesting play on an old cliche.
Short Story / Henry, une
I think that this piece is a little difficult to review in and of itself. There's a lot of vague references that I think are probably addressed in other text from the novel you're writing, which makes it a little hard to be totally involved and absorbed. You have a pretty fluid writing style, and Henry is interesting. I get the feeling that he's a little off balance; he intends to hurt her but at the same time wants to make things better for her. It doesn't seem all that healthy but there's b...
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