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LOC: Poland
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A thin film of exhaled nicotine covers the browns, greens and sickly pinks of of untended molds on the small living room window. Serenaded by the rhythmic creaking of protesting chair parts she sits, rocking, rocking. Percussion is added by a clock, ticking, tocking. Its cheaply painted facade stirs no memories of a gift gladly received from a forgotten lover. A cigarette is lit by the dieing embers of its predecessor. A runny eyed cat sprawls on her lap, occasionally protesting a fallen ash....
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Version 1
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It is not the scattered prism from a Victorian parlor window that stains this glass. The browns, greens, and pinks of untended molds are lacquered by a nicotine film. The serenade is that of a rhythmic creaking of protesting chair parts as she sits, rocking, rocking Percussion is added by a clock, ticking, tocking. Its cheaply painted facade stirs no memories of a gift gladly received from a forgotten lover. A cigarette is lit by the dieing embers of its predecessor. A runny eyed cat sprawls ...
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Short Story / He was horny She Was Hot
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10 Reviews   6 Comments
He was horny. She was hot. ....... The minuscule vein just below his Apollo-esc ear pulsed in silent, soundless rhythm, betraying the much more compelling throbbing taking place elsewhere in his lanky embodiment of masculine perfection. His atramentous locks lay across his slightly bemused forehead. Plotting the assignation, the rendezvous of intertwining sun kissed limbs, brought him slight amusement as well as as a domineering feeling of masculine power and control. He was indomitably irres...
Version 1
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Window glass dripping from age refracts the morning light. Sojka and the mourning dove serenade in a strange discordant symphony. Replaced are the cacophony of sirens, angry lovers, and predictable trams. New sights cannot camouflage my cage, for you are here; the keeper of the cage. It is a cage constructed strongly of dreams attained and not replaced, Lost passion, obsessions fueled by compulsion: all unyielding bars. It was to be left behind, with unused clothing, broken chairs and fresh ...
Poetry / Pieces of Me
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5 Reviews   3 Comments
Each morning I gather the pieces of me And paste them together hastily, Into a semblance of my identity. Yesterday the eyes were wrong. I saw things differently all day long. Because the right was where the left belongs. Today I fear my nose has gone askew, That roses'frangrence is all too Reminisent of southern BBQ Tomorrow, it will be my mind That’s ignobly left behind. Something for the cat to find
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I like this. It gave me a warm snuggly feeling whilst reading it, and I hope that is what you intended. I almost heard a melody as I read, so I think you've captured the music in the words quite well. My only stumbling block was the smiling squirrel. I felt it awkward, and something to trip over. Also a minor point - should be "an" eye, not "a" eye. I really can relate to your phrase " despite myself." Sometimes we can be our own worst enemy.
Poetry / Untitled
I am sorry but this poem does nothing for me. It is like reading a script for a soap opera - predictable dramatics. I am sure there is real pain and torment being described, but I don't feel it. It is more like an autopsy, rather than an encounter with an anguishing soul. Your imagery is stale, for example the eyes looking back at an unrecognized face. There are a lot of unanswered questions here. Why the pain? Who is the still voice? Unfortunately, so little intrest is created by the by the ...
Announcement number 4 is my favorite, quite quirky and unique. I like the double meaning of "final" in the last announcement. All in all, a refreshing approach by the author. I'd say your goals are met.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Vladimir, My Love
If I were to outline the plot, I would see a good story with a fine potential to entertain. However, almost the entire piece is bogged down in adjective overkill. The first ten paragraphs could easily be tightened up by 50% and 100% improved. You do yourself a diservice with the overkill. I also want to have some reason described for the transition from buterfly world to putrid flesh. Just describing it, doesn't cut it. " But such things cannot exist without calling upon them the powers of sh...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Bad Nazi Rant
While the writer expresses totally understandable indignition, his expression of it is trite and full of over used expressions. Preaching forgiveness and tolerence, he berates and insults. Why not provide the reader a description of the encounte4 so that they can develop their own indignation, and then lead them to a place of tolerence, even for the bigot?
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