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Hey, my name is evanescencerose and i love to write! I usually do song lyrics, but its hard for people to get mine because they usually donm’t rhyme. Anyways, as you can tell i LOVE evanescence and they are my inspiration for a lot of what i do. I am currently working on a novel titled Trinity, and i may be putting up a few chapters as short stories to see what you guys think. Thanks!
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Tired of walking, tired of pain Still with the torture, wait to be slain Thorns on my brow, Crown of the dead, Wait to be back with my father again Walk to my death, up the stone path Beaten and stabbed by my enemies staff Jeers from the crowd Calling my name Father, for talking i brought forth their wrath! Coming so closer, nails to me soon Others are smiling, awaiting my doom Tired, so tired Fall to the ground Pushed to my knees where the cross shadows loom Painfully nailed to the cross whe...
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Would you tell me your favorite flower? Oh, please, would you tell me?Confide in me- tell me your secrets.Your desires. Your aches and pains, joys and sorrows. Would you share with me each thought that scurries from your mind, each emotion, tender and raw, as it is thrust from your still beating heart? Will you trust me, knowing I cannot even let a murmur, be so truth or lies, escape mine lips? Would you, at so long of last, tell me-something, anything! Please, i wish to know, i wish to help ...
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sH*t this thing inside me grows latching itself onto my core a leech it draws its life from mine i grow weakened as it thrives this yearning, wanting make it stop lend me now one day of rest it has begun to feed off of the very hatred that i spurn for it and yet, somthing so lovely and pure to let hatred, or any raw emotion, beat itself unto its path makes it feel like a sin a cry of pain and agony a very curse against God for to feel hatred toward the very gift that God has lent us the great...
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What i never saw What i never heard With the beating of my heart crowding out everything I want to run away Be still the morning light Before it breaks the day and time no longer matters But still before the breaking Alies a peice of hope Lying for the taking But ignored by everyone Shadows coming closer And take all that they see And dark forever coming, won't you please Chorus: Save me from myself Save me from the dark that we have made Save me from myself No longer lost but still so afraid...
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Forever i have been Afraid of being lost Lost in the Lies of all that I created Nothing is real as i Go under
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I found this quote to be a bit odd-it seemed as if you were trying to copy emily dickinson with personifying death in the way that she does, however i was more so confused by your idea than impressed. Though you did reveal a great mastery of diction and word flow, it felt more as though you chose your words based on their connotations rather than to reach a deeper understanding. It also felt that you went back on your words, first showing death as a vicious and cruel being, but then you say y...
I found this a very interesting piece. I thoroughly enjoyed the images that you so eloquently portrayed through use of extreme connotative diction. As well, i thought your idea was imaginitive enough. However, it seemed a bit hasty. I believe that if you elongate some of the ideas and descriptions, it might help add to the magical realism that you are trying to put out. Also, perhaps by focusing more on a single instance/character it can help you fully develop each.
I thought this was quite interesting. I have to admit, some of your points were a little odd for my taste, but some of them really hit my hard. My favorite one was number sixteen where you said" this is your moment of deafness. why?" I felt that question touch me in such a manner- it is a truely deep thought, and i still can't stop thinking about it. Too many people are deaf in this world, either by accident or by choice, but asking why...i had never thought of it that way. As well your last ...
I though that this was absolutly excellent! The imagery that you use to express the surroundings in the first few paragraphs are simply amazing- it was as if i could almost see the steam emerging from the eggs! I loved the complexity as well that you added- you took a relatively complex topic and ou didn't try to simplify it; more often than not, dumbing down poetry just makes it bad to read. I did not at all expect the ending, and the slight shock of what happened was entirely enjoyable. I l...
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