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AGE: 22
LAST LOGIN: April 25

just another struggling writer struggling for the time to write. i’m a cook and a baker at with two different corporations and i’m just trying to improve my writing on the side.

favorite authors would have to be:

Poe
Barker
Lovecraft
&
Rice

other contact information:
www.myspace.com/cognative_dissonance

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Short Story / Faith
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The moon hung high clinging to the cloud choked night, fighting the effacement of darkness that suffocated its unearthly glow. The streets were barren, that darkness swallowing up all but the few feeble lights with the strength and will to remain. The wind blew curses and taunts to the retreating fall. The world of the city will freeze soon, not to be thawed for many a revelation. On top a building, far from the bright lights and false security of the inner city, two pairs of eyes peered thro...
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like stirring up leaves, tossed to the wind in a torrent. taking to the sky cackling and honking, searching for somehwere else to live, to exist. how selfish of me to cause such a stir, when all i wanted was to run, to fly with them by their side.
Poetry / crucifix
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little metal toy suspended like a halo of tarnished links round a sinners neck. a shield for the time to hide tired convictions. pastor claims, “Spiritual Kevlar!”; nothing more than evangelist lies. don the armor and you will bleed from the bullets of Darwin, of atheism. as useful as a breastplate in the sights of a sniper, the headshot of doubt always drains the morale, leaving a cold, hopeless fear sadley clinging to this cross that scarcely my belief.
Poetry / puzzle pieces
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gaze at this unfinished work strewn like confetti across the table. like garbage across my path, each piece i stoop to see, rise and brush away the dust. a tear here, a laugh there, reaching in my pocket to search for more like it, i quickly scurry home. removing my coat and shoes at the door, i reach for the laughter first, then the sorrow, the joy and the wonder, to introduce them where they fit. stepping back i admire this masterpiece, this puzzle, and i smile at where i've been, and how f...
Poetry / beautiful knot
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such simple pleasures, tangling and untying these ends over and over, this repition so addictive. weaving strand over strand, dangling over eternity just for this moment in time. nothing can undo this knot, no longer two, but not quite one, i stretch across her beauty, to fall asleep in her eyes.
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Quotes / Marriage
i can definitely appreciate that quote. reminds me of another quote though; "i've been thinking with my gut since i was fourteen years old, and do you know what i've come find? my guts have got shit for brains".
i can agree with this. i can see in the past where i have written some of the death-list types of work. i can also see why my college professor criticized my work too. writing is a journey, whether you pass through the metropolis of publishing or you stick to the back roads for personal entertainment. i want to be published some day, but i'm not in a hurry. after all it's the adventure that matters right? not the book sales.
Poetry / where I lie
i like the content. waking in confusion after what seems like a bad break (my guess would be a romance gone wrong) and wondering how anything could be real anymore. the piece however seems a bit too choppy to me. the lines are very abrupt.
Lyrics / The Meltdown
whoa. just a few too many goals there. (if this is the same songwriter i reviewed previously, if not disreguard) another good song. the mood of this song is really hateful which for most metal makes for great music (something not to be angry at but to be angry with). the lyrics give off the feeling of supressed emotions, things left untapped under the surface waiting to explode out when given the chance. the only thing i can't get a feel for is the chorus. it seems to throw off the tempo "I f...
Romance / failed test
i like it. there is definitely a sense of lust here. when all else is stripped away, the niceties and courtesies of a relationship, all there is left is that primal urge. i think this piece really reflects that. the only thing that i think that i would change is the he/his 's. i realize that you are trying to keep the character a bit mysterious, but i think the over use of the words drag down the story. i love the last sentence. very cryptic.
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