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AGE: 20
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
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Non-fiction / 6 word memoir
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Masterpiece: adventuresome lesbians. Don’t tell mother.
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Non-fiction / 6 word memoir
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Fiction, unread: even my suicide notes.
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Outside the dome, the sky was vivid blue against the red-orange soil, two stripes of color that mixed on contact, where the dust was blown up into the sky. Alice stared up into the endless, brilliant blue, mesmerized. The wind ripped her laughter from her lips. She opened her arms to it, letting it pelt her with the dust. “Alice!” The faraway voice just barely penetrated the sound of rushing wind that filled her ears. “Alice Feesam!” She closed her eyes against the bright sky, took a deep gul...
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Poetry / falling
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and -- we've fallen tangled with each other up side down on the stairs bruised -- breathless -- laughing --
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Screenplay / Artifice
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INT. HALLWAY, ARTEMIS AND DIANA'S HOUSE -- EARLY MORNING A series of black-framed photographs hanging on the wall of the hallways show two black-haired girls as they get older and older. In the baby photos, held by beaming mom and dad, they are indistinguishable. As they progress through toddlerhood, they wear different colors of the same outfit, but, happily cuddling, continue to look like two copies of the same little cherubim. Moving down the hallway through the more recent photographs, th...
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Short Story / The Singer
I definitely agree that any kind of artistic creation is all about baring one's soul, though I'm not sure how one does so in harmony (don't you usually want to keep any one voice from standing out?). Still, the core rings true, and so, good job :)
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Mmm, the pedant in me really isn't comfortable with "self-definition" as one word. Also, I'm not really clear on what you're saying. The key to these things is to pack in a lot of ideas, but to keep them distinct. This is more of a muddle. I suppose we're writing for self-definition, given the contest, but why despair? It's a bit too abstract for me. Sorry.
I must say, this doesn't really resonate with me. But then, I don't drink. The trick of 6-word memoirs is to pack in as many ideas as possible, though, and you've done a good job of that, playing with our expectations (wine doesn't usually make people -more- sensible) and, presumably, telling us something about your personal writing life. So, well done.
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