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LOC: Arlington Heights, IL
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LAST LOGIN: November 03
LOC: Arlington Heights, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 03
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Additionally, I must say that as much as I enjoy writing, sometimes I enjoy critiquing even more. It takes a certain type of person to let a stranger inside their head to see and feel their work and I respect every writer who exposes themselves to such vulnerability. With that said, please know that if I happen to rip you a new one, its because I really care. Seriously.
Seriously.
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Version 3
15 Reviews
5 Comments
He was on fire. The grass in the yard was dying and the water spigot was rusting and John was asleep on the sofa. The last check came by mail three weeks before the third anniversary of the accident. Sam put the envelope in the front pocket of his work coveralls, the stiff, white corner of the check covering the red embroidered “s” of his name, turning it into something unfamiliar. Sam stood in the center of the tiny kitchen scuffing the rubber soles of his work boots against the chipped bro...
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Version 1
10 Reviews
0 Comments
The north Texas winds are always meaner in the fall, bringing with them thoughts of tornadoes and the musk of the Mississippi. These winds rattle windows off farmhouse frames and spook cattle into believing in a fate worse than the slaughterhouse. These winds don’t care about man made dams or peeling farm stands; if they’re angry, they’ll bowl it all over and stretch it back to the dusty plain it used to be. It’s these winds that’ll wake a man in the middle of the night and force him outsi...
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This was certainly an entertaining and very non-conventional read. The 5th line that begins "using a technique" was difficult to read in that the syntax is a bit jumbled. I know you're working within the confines of the "drabble" but this sentence is the keystone of the piece. Otherwise, very clever.
66.6667% Review Quality (3 Votes)
I really liked this piece for its pace and ease of reading. The dialogue was not only quite natural, but often times quite clever, and overwhelmingly informative. I admire how you were able to deliver some more complex theories through the dialogue while still managing to make it sound like natural voice instead of an instruction book. In so far as the story is concerned, I like what I see so far, but there is no real arc here, no tension or drama to latch to. This leads me to believe it is n...
I like this poem in that it deals well in an overwrought subject. However, there are some things I'd look into, were I you. Firstly, there seems to be a quasi-AB rhyme scheme going on here, which is good. However, its effect is undone because of the absence of a metrical line. For example, the line "we are near the final days of man" is in almost perfect pentameter (5 beats of two syllables per line) and almost perfectly trochaic, that is there is a strong stress followed by a weaker one that...
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