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AGE: 21
LOC: Columbia, SC
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 23

’’THE JUNGLE CREED IS THE STRONG MUST FEED
ON ANY PREY HE CAN
I SAT AT THE FEAST AND WAS BRANDED A BEAST
BEFORE I EVER BECAME A MAN’‘
-DEATH AROUND THE CORNER

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Poetry / The Rain
Version 1
2 Reviews   0 Comments
Most of my peer's shed tears while I shed blood They say I'm cold blooded which means my heart stops beating for those I care This past twelve months has been a sweet nightmare I must be dreamin Dreams of angels singing and dreams of demons screamin My blood,my sweat,and my tears are a substitution for a gap of my pain Tears of blood pouring down,pouring like endless rain I can't escape I am trapped because I must face the fact that I am blind Vision left behind pitch black while reminiscing ...
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Poetry / Trapped
Version 2
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I’m trapped and there’s no possibilty of escape The tears take no shape I’m gasping for another last breath I endlessly think I’m the last of my kind left I’m only getting more violent because It’s so silent yet so bright I stay in the corner with the dark as my light,socializing with my echo Pain reminds me that I’m still alive,I gotta adapt to my surroundings because I'm trapped
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Poetry / Before I die
Version 1
1 Review   1 Comment
Before I die I will wake Then fall like a falling star but with pride The world moves so swiftly yet it seems time has froze Life is too short I'm just trying to play my part Before I die
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Haiku/Senryu / A Warm Touch
kinda short but I liked it
Poetry / Bang
sounds like a one night stand anyways good job
Poetry / "A Poet's Cold"
I thought it was very creative and the title matches the poem so i thought this was well plotted out
sounds like you been in a emotional relationship,what doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.i would let you know what words to change up and what words to take out but then that would be ruining the original poem.as long as your expressing how you feel then it's poetry.i can't tell you what's wrong because i don't know the full situation your in and i can't fully relate to it because i'm not you.if you really got hurt this bad by a loved one then i would say he/she doesn't know how to trea...
Short Story / Tears of Genocide
this was good it sounded like you were in a whole new world when you switched things up like river of blood and blackened sky.it's almost like it's saying the world is coming to an end
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