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AGE:
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LOC: Lucerne, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 29
LOC: Lucerne, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 29
I am a poet, writer, actor, singer, dancer, artist, songwriter. I am all these things secretly.
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Journal Entry 3/21/2007 He looked at me today! What? Of all the days to look at me he looked at me today. Not yesterday when I almost felt creative and beautiful. Not the day before when I might have been smart and funny. Not last week when I put my hair up for him. He looked at me today! I have been watching him for months, two semesters, to be exact. God, this just sucks! It's just fucking lame! SHIT! For two semesters I took the same classes as him, went to Starbucks at the same time ever...
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Journal Entry 3/21/2007 He looked at me today! What? Of all the days to look at me he looked at me today. Not yesterday when I almost felt creative and beautiful. Not the day before when I might have been smart and funny. Not last week when I put my hair up for him. He looked at me today! I have been watching him for months, two semesters, to be exact. God, this just sucks! It's just fucking lame! SHIT! For two semesters I took the same classes as him, went to Starbucks at the same time ever...
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So, the other day I read in the local newspaper that some guy drove to our local park, tied a rope around a concrete picnic table, sat in his car, tied the other end around his neck, and drove into the lake, decapitating himself. Now I thought that was a pretty ballsy way to go out! Couldn't he have just swallowed a handful of pills or some shit? Anyway, I was also thinking that if he was going to cut off his own head he should have done a bit of experimentation first. For instance, he could ...
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Okay. For me, myspace is like people watching while being a lazy fat ass. Cause I can just sit in the privacy of my own home & be nosy! Gotta love that. And, just like real live people watching, you do get your share of, well I'm just gonna come out & say it, WEIRDOS! I mean, I have been reading some profiles that got me thinkin' that there wasn't even a brain part of the sperm to roll down daddy's leg, if you know what I mean! Let me give you a few examples. There was this one guy who wrote,...
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Well.....okay, so last night we had some guests over because it was my baby boy's birthday ( He is a very smart 3 year old. Just shoot me now :)). Anyway, one of the guests had a really weird odor. He smelled like a combination of sulphur, peanut butter & ass. No, I'm not kidding. It was the weirdest smell, but just try to imagine it for yourself................ I know, right! Pure, unadulterated FUNK! So I was telling my sister & she said that she thought he was eating these completely addic...
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Overall I really liked the mood and tone of your piece. It felt so sad and lost. Your line about the "hemmed in child" set the imagery on fire and from the beginning I knew exactly how the writer or character felt. I read the lyrics to "And So It Goes" just so that I could get a feel for your work. Besides a little editing, "Because I have to have you(r) near," I think it is a good piece of poetry. Of course, I am no expert, especially since I like to follow the "spoken word" genre where rule...
The poem seems unfinished. I think because of the last line. If you were to change it to: The pair was $300...It let's the reader know that she has found "the pair," it would give a more valid conclusion to the piece. Also watch your tense. You start out in present tense: "For her birthday that’s what she wants ..." and the you change to past tense: "Something shiny, that she thought bold," it should stay in present tense and would read, "that she thinks bold." Hope this helps.
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