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AGE: 23
LOC: Maspeth, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 22

I live in NYC, born and raised in Queens. College student, third year, creative writing, and philosophy. I want to do the peace corps after i graduate, and then go to journalism school.
I can handle blunt critiques, I’m not going to message you explaining to you why your opinions are wrong. I so want my career to be writing, and would appriciate reviews that keep this in mind, instead of judging it as a hobby.
-Diane

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Novel Treatments / gods of rockwell ch.1 revised
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Recorded and stored in the metal file cabinet she obsessively maintained was; all she had, all that she would ever have to show for her self, the tiny bit of the universe that she comprehended, found coherent, formulated theories with, could interpret real meaning from, managed to grasp some sort of control over, the miniscule bit that was not fleeting. The ends of Susanna’s index and middle fingers wafted outlines of the manila folders’ edges, as she mentally audited the information typed an...
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Novel Treatments / the gods of rockwell chap 3
Version 2
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Susanna pushed the shopping cart down the frozen food aisle, and stopped to pick up the last ingredient on her list. She opened the freezer door, and heard Mrs. Gurdy’s high pitched gossip rant roll down the aisle. She was a round woman that Susanna frequently pictured rolling around town spewing out the ongoings of everyone’s boring lives, never stopping to actually live one of her own. “Is that Susanna? My god, she looks so unkempt, and so thin, my God, didn’t she…” Mrs. Gurdy lowered her v...
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SOCRATES WAS SAID TO RARELY BATHE I knew someone that based his final thesis for his Political Science Master’s degree with the assertion that, “Everything is Everything.” He was required to prove this thesis statement verbally to the head faculty of the NYU Political Science department, and they were not impressed. However, after backing them into a corner every time they disputed his statement, they passed him. I understand why the professors who have obviously already come to realize that ...
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Novel Treatments / The Gods of Rockwell chap 2
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Susanna opened the medicine cabinet’s three mirrors just enough to be able to look at herself without making direct eye contact. She tugged at her skin, ran her finger down her profile, pushed her eyebrows up to produce wrinkles on her forehead, and caught a glance at her reflection in the mirror hung behind her. She moved her shoulders and noticed the various ways the bones jutted out, until her eyes finally met her own. Her hands grasped the cornered edges of the sink; leaning down so forc...
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Sociopath Strut Encompassed in smoke, my friends and I in an alley a stones throw from school scatter our seeds on cement cultivate what we think is real. Within earshot is the track team’s frivolous... five mile warm-up sprint, drowned out by our critiques of grafitti thrown upon garage doors. My tag if ever sprayed or written would have been a fuchsia-“Puff,” Undecipherable names of the unsettled the unmarked, the forever unknown. We know now, anarchy isn’t “happening.” At my locker, a sni...
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Poetry / x-possessed
I suggest you attempt to write a revision of this piece without using the words I or You. It would be a great challenge for you, and you will be surprised by how much the quailty of this poem with increase after doing so.
Poetry / emotional vacuum
this is so well written up until the 7nth line. It is very difficult to write about this topic and maintianing a unique voice. You need to look over the style of this piece's first 7 lines and go through the rest with a fine tooth comb to bring it's quailty up to the first few lines. This seems like the type of piece that you should work on and walk away from and come back with after absorbing some great wording and metaphors to portray the mundaness of day to day living. I love the dark humo...
Quotes / Chaos
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Poetry / The Box
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