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AGE: 45
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 05

  My goal on this space is to have my writing grow from your reviews. What I have in mind is a book, written in classic Erma Bombeck style, about very specific moments in my life that I felt the experience and/or lesson ties into a universal theme that other people could relate to…the moments when I feel like my mind and my heart exclaimed “I get it!”.
  These are my rough drafts of those chapters. With this in mind, please, feel free to review, message, etc. with your suggestions, comments. Like I said…I’m on Urbis to grow as a writer.

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Short Story / United Nation's Island
Version 1
7 Reviews   12 Comments
Our national image is suffering. I do not understand the entire picture. I try. I read an array of books in attempt to educate myself on both side of an issue. The knowledge flirts with my mind, teasing me with a false sense of understanding and by the next book I’m back to being confused. I can’t connect all the dots. My father, in his early seventies, has had his fill of politics. I.e., we were talking about the 2008 Elections: “I think they should round up all the politicians in the world...
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Non-fiction / To be somebody
Version 1
4 Reviews   3 Comments
“What is the most fundamental human need?” I blanched when I saw the question. This was the mid-term and a large portion of my grade would be contingent upon this paper. Was this a trick question? Where was the thick-stacked exam bearing the list of multiple choice questions I had flipped through in other classes? This single-line rhetoric was more of an eternal question that experts from every field of academia could debate endlessly. I needed this grade; I had to have some sense of achieve...
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Poetry / Thirty Two Sentences
Version 2
21 Reviews   34 Comments
Thirty two sentences... I. Dada. Baby son. Eat. Sleep. Funny. Book. Again. Dance. Silly. Say, "thank you". Welcome. See. What's that? Pretties. What's that sound? Listen. Help. Share. Wait nicely. Love softly. No-no. Why? It's wrong. I'm sorry. Good boy. I did it. Look at you! More. Quiet time. Promise. I love you. Night-night. II. What happened? I don't know. You need an answer. Why? You know why. No, I don't. You are better than that behavior. It wasn't that bad. It wasn't safe. Its fine. ...
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Short Story / Taken for Granted in Kindness and Despair (PREFACE AND CHAPTER 1)
by jcextra
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Quotes / The saddest epitaph
by dpak
It seems both, saying everthing about the character and yet I know nothing about the character whatsoever. This is a good memoir submission, better than most I have read. Nice job. It's nice to be left wondering, yet still have the answer.
Short Story / words
by Shelby
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Poetry / caring love
by lookingbeyond
It's endearing. I have ran across five or six memoirs about love, but yours and only one other were hopeful. The other memoir basically came to a similar conclusion...Love is a verb! Nice
Short Story / Inspiration
by 1SHO
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