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AGE: 23
LOC: Alexandria, MN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 26

My name is Ryan, I’m 21 years old and am currently attending college for Law Enforcement. I have been writing, in some form or another, since I was about 16 years old. A majority of my works are poetry, but my true passion is novel writing. Nearly a year ago I began undertaking a huge, 5 novel long writing project entitled “Republika”. I have posted certain excerpts on Urbis so that I can obtain a better understanding of my flaws as a writer.

Right now, school envelopes a massive amount of my personal life, with work trailing not far behind, so every bit of spare time is pumped into my current novel, Republika: The Fierside Massacre. My inspiration is rooted in both military science fiction and standard science fiction. My first ever …

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Warpath Damn mud. Always with the mud. Tim found it increasingly difficult to move as the sludge sucked his armored boots into the ground with every step he took. At times, he battled harder with Mother Nature than he did with the Confederates. The skyline was a beautiful array of oranges, reds, and yellows as the sun faded into the distance. He couldn’t help but stop and gaze at the dazzling scenery just beyond their position. He knew he would have to take as much of it in as he could, as ni...
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Ivan Denisovich His sentence was supposed to have been over four years ago, but again he found himself freezing in the barracks of the work camp. Ivan had worked out his ten year sentence, but just to spit in his face they added another four years on to his punishment. He received a letter the day before telling him that on the day of his release, his wife and children would be at the train station to meet him for the first time in fourteen years. The thought of this stuck in his head, but t...
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Warpath Damn mud. Always with the mud. Tim found it increasingly difficult to move as the sludge sucked his armored boots into the ground with every step he took. At times, he battled harder with Mother Nature than he did with the Confederates. The skyline was a beautiful array of oranges, reds, and yellows as the sun faded into the distance. He couldn’t help but stop and gaze at the dazzling scenery just beyond their position. He knew he would have to take as much of it in as he could, as ni...
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Poetry / From Me To You
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Your golden locks and skin so fair, Have me in an entrancing stare. When I see you my heart does swell, I love you more than words can tell. I miss so many things like; you, your scent, your laugh, the way you chew. The hardest part of loving you, Is the small things I cannot do. Like hold you in my arms all day, show you the things I cannot say. I can’t wipe away any tears, Or keep you from your darkest fears. I love the little things you do, a gift, a hug, a kiss from you. The way you say ...
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Lieutenant Colonel Jakob Fierside; the name alone brought fear into the hearts of the enemy. Jakob Fierside was one of the most trusted men within the entire ORB division, proving himself in battle time and time over. Although he directly held command over the 12th ORB, he was looked up to by every ORB detachment within the Republic Armed Forces. Troops feared him, generals were intimidated by him, and civilians loathed him. The Republic High Command, after seeing the lengths Fierside would ...
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Novel Treatments / c. 1346
To be honest, the names are a little hard to get a hold of haha. I did enjoy the opening to the piece, it introduced the character and surroundings very well. This is very description-intensive, which I enjoy, not to say your dialogue is lacking, that's also good. I just find your ability to describe things is your strong point. The descriptions are very vivid and rich, very detailed and it helps the reader envision not only your characters themselves, but the place they're in. There were no ...
Novel Treatments / Daddy Alb--Chapter 1
I really liked the opening, it gave you a sense of the character right from the get-go. The dialogue is well constructed, I felt the way it was crafted together was rich and the details throughout the story was fantastic. I felt like I was actually there. I could not find anything grammatically incorrect with this, but I may have read over them as I found myself sucked into the piece. I think you're dialogue is the strongest part of your piece. Good job!
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Novel Treatments / Heaven's Gate (Prologue)
I usually don't like first person writing, but it seems to fit with the theme of the prologue here. As far as I can tell by reading over it once or twice, I don't see any mechanical flaws. I think you have a well thought out piece of work and assuming the rest of the book is of the same quality you would have a very interesting read that would keep peoples attention. Nice work.