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AGE: 21
LOC: Waynesburg, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 21

I’m a Literature / Creative Writing student currently studying at Oxford University. I’m still just developing as a writer and I appreciate any help that you leave me! Thanks!

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Poetry / Joan and Philip
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Joan and Philip You look me over as if you have never seen me. I am dressed in sackcloth, tied to the pole. I am St. Joan of Arc, my bones burning me from the inside. You are the inquisitor; you weigh the verdict in your hands and pick at your fingernails. Or perhaps you are St. Philip Neri with the heart too large even ribs fall in the byways. We will stand next to each other in the Hallelujah Chorus— my soprano to your baritone. You floated into heaven, I burned to the ground; they gathered...
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I have loved faces I will not see again I have loved faces I will not see again – faces of sand and earth, faces steeped on mountain tops, faces lilting on ocean bottom, faces resting at the mouths of streams. I have loved faces I will not see again, mirrored in my empty palms. I have loved faces I cannot reach falling away between my fingertips: faces stirred by idle winds and the sad shifts of the tide. I have loved faces I will not see again. Though I cannot remember them each – restricted...
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Poetry / Dusk Sun
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Dusk Sun Give me but a moment to set aside these books (the authors, all dead), and we shall go out into this night strapped together beneath an umbrella. Pennsylvania hums to the drone of an evening wind. But we shall listen to the rain and watch these skittering shadows find solace in an alley’s embrace. Give me but a moment and we shall go— we’ll watch March rise up on weary bones and ravage the streets around us. We shall walk and worry about the mutterings of a street lamp and the call o...
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Poetry / Sailor's Song
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Sailor’s Song You and I are but the wind’s sigh. The break of the ocean against this beach is your lips murmur in the night. You have opened my throat to feel the soft pattering of infants and see the shine of a distant moon, but you have not seen the evergreen trees trembling beneath my collarbone or the waterfall spilling from my knees. You have not seen the silent nuns that pass along the ridges of my spine or the hungry crows lined round my heart. You listen to my breathing in this lightl...
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Short Story / Saints
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Saints Diane is seated at the table – a large, round piece with a bare, dark top. She is seated, legs crossed, torso forward, elbows on the table, shuffling cards between her hands. She has beautiful hands – small and thin. Each slim finger has a ring. There are silver ones that catch the poor light that filters down from the above light and twinkle with a hidden preciousness. There are colorful ones, little beaded things that twirl around her fingers like tiny ballerinas making their first t...
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Poetry / Forbidden Love
This poem obviously hits on an idea that is a real crowd pleaser and intriguing to many people. I'm not that fond of the ending though. I wish it could end with something more concrete. I like that the poem is addressed to the reader or at least to a "you." It seems to be reflective on the feelings of whoever is behind the poem which creates an interesting line of thought. However, the poem abounds in generalities. Almost never is a concrete image brought before the poem. The continued use of...
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I really like this piece. Your tone is very intriguing and I enjoy the mix of beauty and terror that you create. I really like the last two lines "and shadows / of your words." I think the idea of curls turning into a halo is a bit cliche, but this image is more unique with the same kind of questioning undercast. Also, I think that maybe some of the line breaks are just a bit too broken. I would question what some of the breaks accomplish as they sometimes leave words alone on a line with ext...
Poetry / insomnia
I know that this poem is not very long, but for some reason I think it has quite a drawing effect to it. I think that it would be made better by adding more, but I respect the impulse to pair down writing to just what you want to say. I think that the last line is curiously ambiguous as to what exactly is meant. There seems to be a duality with the word "lie" that I really like. I would really like to see what you would do with this if you expanded it. I like the tone and I bet some really in...
Poetry / Romance
I really like this poem. I have just been introduced lately to found poems and I think that you did piece these lines together very well. All of the lines seem in themselves very interesting, so good choices. I am really a fan of the ending as well. So, good job!
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