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AGE: 53
LOC: Chicago, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 12

Male. Married. Ex-scientist. Almost an Academic once. Raised in NJ, living near Chicago. Currently in love with theater and playwriting.

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Scrambled brains with ketchup; moiling thoughts and that queasy/anxious/enervated-yet-energized feeling that I cannot seem to shake lately. Restless. It’s like a pale ghost of the old dark slit-my-wrists despair that I used to know so well. But yet not the same, not at all. I feel like if I could open the top of my head, my brain would be there, but not a brain. A gray, greasy cauldron of all that I am and am not but wish I was, bubbling now, the good and the bad roiling around, bobbing...
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Short Story / RUN!
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RUN! (copyright 2005 by Corydalus) So that Sunday night, after supper when it was a bit cooler, I went over to the playground on Croft Street, to see if maybe Roman could shoot some hoops, test out my new basketball, the official NBA Spalding. Roman lived right across the street from the playground. The schoolyard over at PS 4 was closer, but Reno and his thugs liked to hang out there; for safety’s sake, I had been avoiding Reno since school let out. I dribbled my way down Orient Street, lovi...
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Poetry / Rain (9-12-2001)
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Rain: We need it to rain. Not the flash and bellow of thunderstorms, But just a drizzle, A soft mist, for a day and a night And a day. A comforter Of mottled gray-black clouds To hide beneath. Tiny silver droplets To run in thin, gleaming sheets And wash the dust from the faces Of great, sad buildings, Like a mother washes her child's tear-stained face. Rain, To wet the grass, And drip from the eaves of a million homes, Murmuring gently in the gutters and downspouts, Soothing us when we awake...
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An interesting essay on an interesting and important subject. It generally lays out its thesis well, in logical progression. One bit of advice: The paragraph is your friend. No matter how well written it may be, a single big block of text without breaks is hard on the reader. Develop a point and then start a new paragraph, either to elaborate, or start a new point. It gives the reader's eye and brain a break, and a cue that there is a transition to make.
Poetry / Yet Another Sigh
The simple rhyme scheme makes it very song-like. "So that I can feel your shoulder "beneath my face… Sweet imagery.
Poetry / Cibo Matto Blues
Short, bittersweet and evocative.
Short Story / me
I like stream of consciousness narrative, but there are a lot of things in here that look more like errors in spelling and grammar: "...for all them to see me...." "...dreaming way wishing they were me?my head hurts...." Unless you are being wildly experimental, they make it hard to follow. I exclude the lower-case "i" because I really do think that was done on purpose and I have no problem with it. The idea of hands that can never be cleaned is interesting and clever. A metaphor worth pursui...
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