hi there, i like this ..simple butvery good..it just show you...simplcity but orginal is the best way to go,,,,to bad you couldn't enter this in the writer's memoir...it's even better for that contest...one of the best one's i have read...niceeeeeee,,,jim

hi there, well said....my first "10"....good luck with it...:),,jim

hi there, well i'm not sure how this is related to a writer's life...and usually a quote is a more positive/helping thing then a hurtful...sorry..that's just how i feel and see it..i did give you a five because it can be true and it is a something relateable, but again..not very nice,,,jim

hi there, well i'm not sure how this pertians to a writer's memoir but i do like the part of unhappily rich..a nice twist and clever use of the words..(if i could have such unhappiness!!!!....:)...but i have lost my mojo a few times....:)..later,jim

hi there, well it sounds clever and catchy but i don't see myself in any dream or me in any others dream, that's for sure...but i hope your right..(like this is one big dream by God, maybe at best)..and it gets better..:),,,,jim

hi there, no it isn't, i agree, dealing with deathat any level daily is not a healthy thing for the average person, but those angels who deal with human tragedy and dying are true angels...my hats go off to them..if you woulda worked in the human factor instead of the fish etc. i woulda gave you a higher score...(and yes i do love animals, buti like humans just a little more...it may be just a little...:)...but it is a little more),,,,later,,jim

hi there, you seem to be all over the place in this piece, not really focusing on one theme..like E.D. what they maybe ..you didn't mention it throughout..i know your not going to like this but you tried to get to creative...and ended up with a whole lot of poetic lines that do not belong together, cause together they don't make much sense..pick a theme..title,use it, and stick to it, and use your creative poetic talent to develope it..cause you do have talent..it just needs to be rein in, ti...

hi there, i don't see how death succeeds us..2 e's..:)..maybe "wins out" or maybe death brings that cycle of life to an end...i think you have something but a few word changes could make a hugh difference..go for it..it'll be even better..jim

hi there, well that's one opinion, in a nicely written quote, a little violent if you ask me personally but you could very well be right, if all else fails.... good luck with your book......later, jim

hi there, this is a very good start to a very good poem..i think it's to long for a quote though..quotes are usually 6-8 words long, for that short but sweet clever saying of some type of knowledge or wisdom..but again, this would make a great poem, i love the way you state how like an empty shell, you get casted away..but find (or someone finds you)..for a new fresh love..very orginal..don't waste such a good idea and start on a great poem on just a quote..later,,jim